Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了基本意思，但存在语法错误和用词不当，如“birthday ways”应为“birthday with”，“big mail”应为“big meal”。建议注意单词拼写和语法结构，避免重复和冗余，使表达更自然流畅。

例: It depends on who I spend my birthday with. If I am with my family, we usually go out to eat a big meal, which I enjoy. However, if I celebrate with my friends, we often go singing. Regardless of who I'm with, we always have a birthday cake to celebrate.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和词汇错误，如“knew closest”应为“new clothes”，句子结构不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，注意时态和词汇的正确使用，使表达更准确。

例: When I was young, I always celebrated my birthday with my parents and my dad. They would first buy new clothes for me, and then we would go out to eat a delicious and large meal, followed by a beautiful cake.

提案: 回答中有词汇和表达错误，如“first day”应为“birthday”，“represent my burning”应为“represents my birth”。建议加强词汇准确性和句子逻辑，避免模糊表达。

例: Yes, celebrating my birthday is very important to me because it not only marks the day I was born, but also gives me a chance to do things I don't usually do in daily life. For example, I can buy things I have always wanted.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，如“carry them”应为“care for them”，“said Celebrating”表达不完整。建议注意句子完整性和逻辑连贯，使用恰当的词汇表达感情。

例: I think the most important birthdays to celebrate in China are our parents' birthdays because they gave us life. We should always appreciate and care for them. Celebrating their birthdays is a good opportunity to express our love and gratitude.

× Well it depends on who I spend my birthday ways.

✓ Well, it depends on who I spend my birthday with.

句中缺少介词with，导致介词使用错误。'spend time with someone'是固定搭配，需加介词with。

× If it is with my families we usually go to eat a big mail which I like an if I celebrate my birthday with my friends where you only go to sing songs.

✓ If it is with my family, we usually go to eat a big meal which I like, and if I celebrate my birthday with my friends, we only go to sing songs.

families应为family，表示家庭的单数形式；mail应为meal，拼写错误。

× But no matter who I'm with we always have a birthday cake to celebrate.

✓ But no matter who I'm with, we always have a birthday cake to celebrate.

句中缺少逗号，影响句子结构的清晰度。

× When I was young I always celebrated my birthday with my parents and I daddy.

✓ When I was young, I always celebrated my birthday with my parents and my daddy.

I daddy应为my daddy，代词使用错误。

× My parents would buy some knew closest for me firstly and go take me to go to eat a delicious and big meals with a beautiful cake.

✓ My parents would buy some new clothes for me first and take me to eat delicious and big meals with a beautiful cake.

knew应为new，拼写错误；closest应为clothes，拼写错误；firstly改为first，更符合口语表达；go take me to go to eat结构冗余，应简化为take me to eat；meals前不加冠词，且meals为复数，delicious和big形容词顺序调整。

× Yes, it is very important for me because first day is not only a day which represent my burning, but also a day I can do something which I never do in the daily life.

✓ Yes, it is very important for me because the first day is not only a day which represents my birth, but also a day I can do something which I never do in daily life.

first day前应加定冠词the；represent应为represents，主谓一致；burning应为birth，词汇错误；daily life前不加冠词。

× For example, I can buy some things which I always want to buy.

✓ For example, I can buy some things that I have always wanted to buy.

which引导的定语从句中，时态应与主句一致，使用现在完成时更合适。

× I think it is birthday of our parents because our parents gave us life and we need to appreciate and carry them all the time, said Celebrating their birthday is a important chance to express our love and.

✓ I think it is the birthday of our parents because our parents gave us life and we need to appreciate and care for them all the time. Celebrating their birthday is an important chance to express our love and appreciation to them.

birthday前应加定冠词the；carry them应为care for them，词汇错误；said不合适，应去掉；a important应为an important，冠词使用错误；appreciations应为appreciation，单数形式。