Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和用词不够准确，表达不够自然。建议注意时态一致，避免重复表达，并使用更丰富的词汇来描述生日活动。

例: On my birthday, I usually spend time with my family playing games or card games. I feel very happy because being with loved ones makes me feel supported and not alone.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用正确的时态和句子结构，并具体描述生日庆祝活动。

例: When I was young, my mom usually organized birthday parties at home. We invited friends, ate delicious food, and played soccer together.

提案: 表达不够连贯，语法和词汇使用有误。建议用更清晰的句子表达观点，并说明原因。

例: I think celebrating my birthday is important because being with friends and family makes me feel happy and loved.

提案: 回答内容不清晰，语法错误多，表达混乱。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，并使用正确的词汇和语法。

例: I think my friend Alex's birthday is the most important to me because we have a close friendship. We enjoy playing soccer and other games together, and she is very kind to me.

× I usually play on my birthday, I play with my family, we play games or pay cards and I feel really happy because someone is besides me and I felt I'm not alone.

✓ I usually play on my birthday. I play with my family, we play games or play cards and I feel really happy because someone is beside me and I feel I'm not alone.

这里“pay cards”应为“play cards”，是拼写错误，属于单复数问题。还有“besides me”应为“beside me”，表示在我身边。动词时态应保持一致，felt改为feel。

× I usually play on my birthday, I play with my family, we play games or pay cards and I feel really happy because someone is besides me and I felt I'm not alone.

✓ I usually play on my birthday. I play with my family, we play games or play cards and I feel really happy because someone is beside me and I feel I'm not alone.

句中“felt”应改为“feel”，因为描述的是习惯性动作和感受，应该用现在时。

× When I'm young I usually celebrate birthday by my mom, find arrest around an we invite some friends to play here and stuff like that.

✓ When I was young, I usually celebrated my birthday with my mom, found presents around and we invited some friends to play here and stuff like that.

描述过去的事情，应该用过去时态，'I'm'应改为'was'，'celebrate'改为'celebrated'，'find'改为'found'，'invite'改为'invited'。

× When I'm young I usually celebrate birthday by my mom, find arrest around an we invite some friends to play here and stuff like that.

✓ When I was young, I usually celebrated my birthday with my mom, found presents around and we invited some friends to play here and stuff like that.

“celebrate birthday by my mom”中的“by”用法错误，应改为“with”，表示和妈妈一起庆祝。

× When I'm young I usually celebrate birthday by my mom, find arrest around an we invite some friends to play here and stuff like that.

✓ When I was young, I usually celebrated my birthday with my mom, found presents around and we invited some friends to play here and stuff like that.

“arrest”应为“presents”，是复数形式，表示礼物。

× Alex is birthday is the most important to me because we have charist an we have a great friend lish ship an we play soccer three flights Einan more games an she's being nice to me.

✓ Alex's birthday is the most important to me because we have Christmas and we have a great friendship and we play soccer three times and more games and she's nice to me.

“Alex is birthday”应为“Alex's birthday”，表示所有格。

× Alex is birthday is the most important to me because we have charist an we have a great friend lish ship an we play soccer three flights Einan more games an she's being nice to me.

✓ Alex's birthday is the most important to me because we have Christmas and we have a great friendship and we play soccer three times and more games and she's nice to me.

“friend lish ship”应为“friendship”，是名词，表示友谊。

× I think it's important for me to celebrate my birthday because I like someone besides me and they can make me feel more happier so I feel like.

✓ I think it's important for me to celebrate my birthday because I like having someone beside me and they can make me feel happier, so I feel good.

“more happier”是错误的比较级用法，happier已经是比较级，不需要more。

× I think it's important for me to celebrate my birthday because I like someone besides me and they can make me feel more happier so I feel like.

✓ I think it's important for me to celebrate my birthday because I like having someone beside me and they can make me feel happier, so I feel good.

“someone besides me and they”中“someone”是单数，后面用复数代词“they”不一致，应改为“having someone beside me and they”。

× I think it's important for me to celebrate my birthday because I like someone besides me and they can make me feel more happier so I feel like. To celebrate my birthday.

✓ I think it's important for me to celebrate my birthday because I like having someone beside me and they can make me feel happier, so I feel good celebrating my birthday.

句子结构不完整，“so I feel like. To celebrate my birthday.”不连贯，应合并为完整句子。