Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然で直接的ですが、文法の誤りや表現の繰り返しを避けるために、より簡潔で正確な表現を心がけましょう。また、接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより効果的です。

例: I usually celebrate my birthday with my family and friends by having a party. We eat birthday cake, and I often receive presents from them.

提案: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。過去形を正しく使い、文を簡潔にまとめる練習をしましょう。また、具体的な内容を明確に述べることが重要です。

例: When I was young, I had birthday parties with my family. My grandmother often gave me money as a gift, and my parents gave me a cake.

提案: 回答が断片的で意味が不明瞭です。理由を明確に述べ、文をつなげる接続詞を使い、文法的に正しい文章を作る練習をしましょう。

例: Yes, definitely. My birthday is an important event for my family, so we always celebrate it together by eating dinner and spending time with each other.

提案: 質問に答えられなかったため、少なくとも一般的な意見や推測を述べる練習をしましょう。知らない場合でも、話を広げる工夫が必要です。

例: I'm not sure about specific birthdays in China, but I think celebrating family members' birthdays, like parents or grandparents, is very important.

× I heard birthday party with my family and my grandmother often give me some money for phrasing my birthday and my mother and my father gave me. Sparse a cake.

✓ I had a birthday party with my family and my grandmother often gave me some money for praising my birthday, and my mother and my father gave me a cake.

The verb 'heard' is incorrect here; the correct past participle form is 'had' to indicate possession of a party. 'Give' should be in past tense 'gave' to match the past time frame. 'Sparse a cake' is unclear and likely a mistake; it should be 'gave me a cake' to complete the meaning. The sentence also needs proper conjunctions and articles for clarity.

× I heard birthday party with my family and my grandmother often give me some money for phrasing my birthday and my mother and my father gave me. Sparse a cake.

✓ I had a birthday party with my family and my grandmother often gave me some money for praising my birthday, and my mother and my father gave me a cake.

The verbs 'give' and 'heard' are incorrectly used in present and past participle forms respectively; they should be in the simple past tense 'gave' and 'had' to match the past context of the sentence.

× I heard birthday party with my family and my grandmother often give me some money for phrasing my birthday and my mother and my father gave me. Sparse a cake.

✓ I had a birthday party with my family and my grandmother often gave me some money for praising my birthday, and my mother and my father gave me a cake.

The phrase 'for phrasing my birthday' is incorrect; the correct preposition and verb should be 'for praising my birthday' to express the intended meaning of giving money as a compliment or celebration.

× Yes, definitely, because. Just day of my birth is important event for my family. We all phone. Eat Dena Anne, celebrate my birthday with my family.

✓ Yes, definitely, because the day of my birth is an important event for my family. We all phone, eat dinner, and celebrate my birthday together.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper structure. 'Just day of my birth' is missing an article and subject-verb agreement. 'We all phone. Eat Dena Anne' are incomplete sentences and contain spelling errors ('Dena Anne' should be 'dinner'). The corrected version combines ideas into coherent sentences with proper grammar.

× Sorry, I don't know where about the customer birthday in China so. I can say anything so sorry.

✓ Sorry, I don't know much about customers' birthdays in China, so I can't say anything. Sorry.

The phrase 'where about the customer birthday' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'much about customers' birthdays' to express lack of knowledge. Also, 'I can say anything' should be 'I can't say anything' to convey inability to answer. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.