Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯且语法错误较多，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用正确的时态和表达方式。可以先直接回答问题，再补充细节，保持句子简洁且逻辑清晰。

例: I usually celebrate my birthday by holding a small party with my close friends. We either go to a hotel or stay at home, where we enjoy delicious food and play interesting games together.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，建议使用正确的时态和词汇，句子结构要完整，避免断句和拼写错误。可以先说明习惯，再描述具体活动。

例: When I was a kid, I used to get up early and look forward to receiving beautiful gifts from my parents. After that, my whole family would go to a restaurant to have dinner and celebrate together.

提案: 回答不连贯且有语法错误，建议使用完整句子表达观点，避免断句，清晰表达反思的意义。可以用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I think it's very important because it is not just the day I was born, but also a chance to reflect on my personal growth over the past year. I like to look back at my achievements and set new goals.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，建议完整表达观点，使用正确的语法和词汇，说明为什么60岁生日特别重要。

例: In China, I believe that parents' birthdays are very important to celebrate because they gave us life. I think the 60th birthday is the most important because it marks a significant milestone in a person's life.

× Are you gonna celebrate my birthday by holding a small party with my close friend?

✓ I am going to celebrate my birthday by holding a small party with my close friends.

句子中使用了“Are you gonna”，这是疑问句形式，但学生想表达的是自己将要做的事情，应该用陈述句“I am going to”。另外，“friend”应为复数形式“friends”，因为通常会和多个朋友一起庆祝。

× Why test delicious food the ender play interesting games together, although the celebr.

✓ We will taste delicious food and then play interesting games together during the celebration.

原句中“Why test delicious food the ender play interesting games together, although the celebr.”语法混乱，缺少连词和完整结构。应使用连词“and then”连接动作，且句子应完整表达意思。

× When I was a kid I used to get up early and locked forward to receiving beautiful gifts from my parents after or my whole family were the go to a restaurant too.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to get up early and look forward to receiving beautiful gifts from my parents. After that, my whole family would go to a restaurant too.

“locked forward”应为“looked forward”或更常用的“look forward”，且“look forward”后应接动名词形式“to receiving”。另外，“were the go to a restaurant”结构错误，应改为“would go to a restaurant”。

× Have dinner and celebrate together.

✓ We would have dinner and celebrate together.

该句缺少主语，导致句子结构不完整。应加上主语“we would”使句子完整。

× Yes, I think it's very important because it is not just the day that I was born. But also a chance to reflect my personal growth over the past year. And I like to. Log back at my AD.

✓ Yes, I think it's very important because it is not just the day I was born, but also a chance to reflect on my personal growth over the past year. And I like to look back at my achievements.

原句中“But also a chance...”是句子碎片，应与前句合并。动词“reflect”后应加介词“on”。“Log back at my AD”拼写错误，应为“look back at my achievements”。

× In China, I believe that parents birthday are very important to celebrate because they are the person who give us life and I think the 60th birthday is. Most important because.

✓ In China, I believe that parents' birthdays are very important to celebrate because they are the people who give us life, and I think the 60th birthday is the most important one.

“parents birthday”应为复数所有格“parents' birthdays”。“person”应为复数“people”，因为指的是父母双方。句子末尾不完整，应补充完整表达。