Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and complete answer with correct sentence structure. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and keep your answer natural and concise.

例: On my birthday, I usually sit with my family, cut the birthday cake, and open my gifts. I always feel happy spending time with them.

提案: Focus on using past tense correctly and form complete sentences. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and add specific details to enrich your response.

例: When I was young, I opened my gifts and sat with my family. I was always happy with them, and we cut the cake together during the celebration.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly to connect your ideas. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons.

例: Yes, I think it is important to celebrate birthdays because it helps us remember special moments as we grow up. So, we should always celebrate our birthdays.

提案: Make sure to answer the question directly and use clear, correct sentences. Provide specific reasons and use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

例: In China, I think my parents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate because these celebrations create unforgettable memories with my family.

× I cut the birthday cake. And I opened my gift at I usually sit with my family at always have to be happy with them and never be.

✓ I cut the birthday cake and opened my gift. I usually sit with my family and always have to be happy with them and never be sad.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper conjunctions, causing confusion. Combining related ideas with conjunctions improves clarity and sentence flow.

× I opened my gifts and I said I sit with my family and I always were was happy with them.

✓ I opened my gifts and said I sat with my family and I was always happy with them.

The verbs 'sit' and 'were was' are incorrectly used in present and mixed past forms. Past tense verbs 'sat' and 'was' should be used to match the past context.

× And I was cutting the cake when they gave it to me.

✓ I was cutting the cake when they gave it to me.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal and unnecessary here. Removing it improves sentence structure without changing meaning.

× Yes, it is important for every person and people.

✓ Yes, it is important for every person and for people.

The phrase 'every person and people' is awkward. Adding 'for' before 'people' clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun usage.

× Because if you do, you're celebrate and your birthday, you would remember it until you grow up.

✓ Because if you celebrate your birthday, you will remember it as you grow up.

The phrase 'you're celebrate and your birthday' is incorrect. Correcting to 'if you celebrate your birthday' and adjusting verb forms improves grammar and clarity.

× So you have to always. Celebrate your birthday.

✓ So you always have to celebrate your birthday.

The original sentence is fragmented with a period splitting the phrase. Combining into one sentence improves flow and correctness.

× We then portant to celebrate is my mom and dad because this is the the IT will be the best celebration in my life and I will never forget it for all of my life and this celebration will be in my heart and everywhere with my family.

✓ The most important birthdays to celebrate are my mom and dad's because it will be the best celebration in my life. I will never forget it, and this celebration will always be in my heart and with my family everywhere.

The original sentence is confusing and contains many errors including word misuse and sentence fragments. Rewriting for clarity, proper subject-verb agreement, and correct word choice improves understanding.