Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating when you began, avoid unusual words like "inaugurated", and give one brief supporting detail (age or situation). Keep to 1–3 sentences.

例: I started using the internet when I was around eight years old. I began with simple games and educational websites, and later I used it more for schoolwork and social media.

提案: Give a direct frequency statement and one reason with linking words. Avoid vague phrasing like "at these days" and split into clear short sentences (max 3).

例: I rarely go online these days because I have a very hectic schedule. For example, I spend most evenings studying and attending classes, so I have little free time for the internet.

提案: Respond directly then add a specific reason and a linking word. Fix grammar (past tense, articles) and keep it concise. Mention what you did instead to show detail.

例: Yes — during my final exams I didn’t use the internet because I wanted to avoid distractions. Instead, I focused on revising, reading textbooks, and practicing past papers.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Use natural collocations (e.g., "spend much time online" not "invest time online"). Keep sentences short and coherent.

例: No, I don’t spend too much time online because I concentrate mainly on my studies. For instance, I usually study for several hours each evening, so I only check the internet briefly for information or messages.

提案: Avoid absolute statements like "I can't think about anything." Give a clear hypothetical response with 2–3 specific activities and use linking words to connect ideas. Finish sentences completely and avoid trailing words.

例: If I didn’t have the internet, I would spend more time outdoors with my friends. For example, we would play football or basketball, and I would also read books or watch more television.

× As far as I remember, I probably inaugurated using Internet at a very young age, which I think would be nearly a decade ago.

✓ As far as I remember, I probably started using the internet at a very young age, which I think was nearly a decade ago.

The verb 'inaugurated' is formal and not collocational with 'using the internet'; 'started' is the correct verb (Grammar problem type ID 26: sentence structure errors). Also 'Internet' should be lowercase 'internet' in this context (Grammar problem type ID 22: article/capitalization error). The tense 'would be' is incorrect for a past time reference; use 'was' to place the action in the past (Grammar problem type ID 6: present tense issue vs past tense — corrected to past tense). Suggestion: use common collocations (start using), keep tense consistent (past simple for completed past events), and use 'internet' lowercase in general usage.

× Actually, hardly. I go on line because at these days I stay quite busy with my hectic schedule which leaves no extra time at all.

✓ Actually, hardly ever. I go online rarely because these days I am quite busy with my hectic schedule, which leaves no extra time at all.

'Hardly' alone is incomplete; 'hardly ever' or 'rarely' properly expresses low frequency (Grammar problem type ID 13: incorrect use of adverbs). 'On line' should be one word 'online' (Grammar problem type ID 26: sentence structure/word formation). 'At these days' is incorrect; use 'these days' and change 'stay' to 'am' for present continuous description of current state (Grammar problem type ID 6: present tense issue). Suggestion: use correct adverb phrases for frequency, write 'online' as one word, and use 'these days I am' to describe present ongoing situation.

× As far as I remember, it was my exam period when I. Didn't use Internet and I mainly focus on my study and doing well in my exam.

✓ As far as I remember, it was my exam period when I didn't use the internet, and I mainly focused on my studies to do well in my exams.

The sentence had an incorrect period splitting 'I. Didn't' and inconsistent tense. Combine into one sentence and use past simple 'didn't use' and 'focused' to describe past actions (Grammar problem type ID 5: past tense issue). 'Internet' should be lowercase (Grammar problem type ID 22). 'My study' is better as 'my studies' (Grammar problem type ID 14: quantifier/noun form). Also 'exam' is plural if referring to multiple exams. Suggestion: keep past events in past simple, avoid sentence fragments, and use correct noun forms.

× From my perspective, I invest not that much time online because as a student I fully concentrate on my study. Therefore I hardly have a chance to go online.

✓ From my perspective, I don't spend that much time online because, as a student, I fully concentrate on my studies. Therefore I hardly have a chance to go online.

'Invest not that much time' is unnatural; use 'don't spend that much time' for frequency (Grammar problem type ID 13: incorrect use of verbs/adverbs). Maintain present simple 'don't spend' and 'concentrate' for habitual actions (Grammar problem type ID 6: present tense issue). 'My study' should be 'my studies' (Grammar problem type ID 14). Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'spend time' and plural 'studies' when referring to ongoing academic work.

× To be honest, without Internet I can't think an about anything. However if I had to choose one I would go with my friends outside as well as play different sorts of sports together and also watching television or.

✓ To be honest, without the internet I can't think of anything. However, if I had to choose, I would go out with my friends and play different kinds of sports together, and also watch television.

'Can't think an about' is incorrect; use 'can't think of' (Grammar problem type ID 26: sentence structure errors). 'Internet' should be lowercase (Grammar problem type ID 22). 'Go with my friends outside' is awkward; use 'go out with my friends' (Grammar problem type ID 11: incorrect use of prepositions). List items must use parallel verb forms: 'play' and 'watch' (not 'watching') after 'would' (Grammar problem type ID 8: verb + -ing form and ID 7: future/modal verb usage). Suggestion: use 'think of', 'go out with', and maintain parallel infinitive forms after 'would'.