Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Start with a clear, direct topic sentence and correct tense/grammar. Avoid repetition and unnecessary fragments. Provide one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep it natural and concise (max 4–5 sentences).

例: I first used the internet when I was in grade ten. At that time I was preparing for a science project and I searched online for ideas and background information. This helped me find examples and images that I included in my project.

提案: Begin with a direct frequency statement, then give specific reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Correct minor grammar (e.g., 'breaks at work'). Keep answers concise and avoid vague phrases like 'very often' without specifics.

例: I go online several times a day, usually every two hours. Whenever I have a break at work I check messages and social media, because my immediate family lives in India and we keep in touch frequently.

提案: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and avoid awkward phrasing. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'for example') correctly and give a concise, specific example. Correct factual phrasing and pronunciation errors (e.g., 'brought to the principal', 'caught using a phone').

例: Yes. During high school exams we were not allowed to use the internet or mobile phones because teachers wanted to prevent cheating. For example, I remember a student was caught using a phone and was taken to the principal's office.

提案: Answer directly and correct grammar. State opinion clearly, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct vocabulary for the language you are learning and avoid vague phrasing like 'learn as skills as I want'.

例: Yes, I do spend too much time online because I use it to study languages and practice skills. For example, I often use apps and videos to learn French, so I keep my phone connected to the internet to study during breaks.

提案: Start with a clear statement and give specific, well-linked alternatives. Correct grammar and word choice ('everything depends on the internet', 'household chores'). Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid redundant phrasing.

例: Life would be difficult without the internet because I rely on it for communication and learning. If I had no internet, I would spend more time reading books, practicing meditation, and doing household chores like cooking and cleaning.

× I remembered that when I was in the grade 10, I used the Internet for the first time.

✓ I remember that when I was in grade 10, I used the Internet for the first time.

The student used 'remembered' (simple past) incorrectly for a general recollection connected to the present conversation; present simple 'remember' is more natural. Also 'in the grade 10' is unidiomatic; use 'in grade 10' or 'when I was in tenth grade.' Ensure tense matches the context of recalling in the interview.

× It was my examination.

✓ It was for an exam.

'It was my examination' is awkward in English. Use 'for an exam' to indicate purpose. Change sentence structure to match natural English collocation.

× I was trying to get the ideas for the My Science Science project.

✓ I was trying to get ideas for my science project.

Redundant 'the My Science Science' and incorrect capitalization. Use 'get ideas for my science project.' This fixes article and word order issues.

× So and at that time I used to Internet.

✓ So at that time I used the Internet.

'Used to Internet' is missing the verb/object structure. The correct phrasing is 'used the Internet' or 'used to use the Internet.' Remove unnecessary 'and' and choose correct verb form.

× I go online very often.

✓ I go online very often.

Sentence is correct. Present simple correctly expresses habitual action; no change needed.

× Whenever I get some breaks at work, I go online to see the messages or any type of texts from my relatives or friends.

✓ Whenever I get a break at work, I go online to check messages or texts from my relatives or friends.

Use 'a break' (singular) or 'breaks' without 'some' for countable instances. 'See the messages' is odd; 'check messages' is idiomatic. 'Any type of texts' can be simplified to 'texts.' Adjust articles and word choice.

× My family lives in India so that is the main reason why I go online every two hours.

✓ My family lives in India, so that is the main reason I go online every couple of hours.

Add a comma before 'so.' 'Every two hours' is acceptable but 'every couple of hours' is more natural. Remove redundant 'why' after 'reason.' Ensure punctuation and natural phrasing.

× Just definitely whenever I had examination until high school, I was not allowed to use a cell phone because due to prevent cheating, my teachers were very strict about it.

✓ Whenever I had exams in high school, I was not allowed to use a cell phone because my teachers were strict to prevent cheating.

Use plural 'exams' and 'in high school' is standard. 'Because due to prevent cheating' is ungrammatical; use 'to prevent cheating' or 'because my teachers were strict to prevent cheating.' Simplify and correct tense and phrase order.

× I remembered that one of the student got to buy the principal because he was stating by using cell phone.

✓ I remember that one student had to be called to the principal because he was caught using a cell phone.

Many issues: 'I remembered' to 'I remember' for present recollection, 'one of the student' should be 'one student' or 'one of the students.' 'Got to buy the principal' is incorrect; likely 'was sent to the principal' or 'had to see the principal.' 'Stating by using cell phone' is meaningless; use 'was caught using a cell phone.' Fix quantifier, verb choice, and clarity.

× I suppose so that I spend too much time online.

✓ I suppose I do spend too much time online.

'I suppose so that I spend' is ungrammatical. Use 'I suppose I do spend' or 'I suppose I spend' to express belief about present habit. Ensure correct clause structure.

× There could be several reasons for that.

✓ There are several reasons for that.

'There could be' suggests possibility, but speaker likely states fact. Present simple 'There are several reasons' is clearer. Keep tense consistent with the assertion.

× First of all, I use the Internet to explore language skills.

✓ First of all, I use the Internet to improve my language skills.

'Explore language skills' is awkward; 'improve my language skills' conveys intended meaning. Use possessive 'my' to specify whose skills.

× For instance, I am learning frank language, so I always need my cell phone with the Internet so that I can learn as skills as I want.

✓ For instance, I am learning French, so I always need my phone with internet access so that I can learn as much as I want.

'Frank language' is likely 'French.' 'Cell phone with the Internet' should be 'phone with internet access.' 'Learn as skills as I want' is ungrammatical; use 'learn as much as I want.' Correct vocabulary and phrase order.

× Life would be very hard without Internet for in my case I everything is dependent on Internet.

✓ Life would be very hard without the Internet because, in my case, everything depends on it.

Add definite article 'the' before 'Internet.' 'For in my case I everything is dependent on Internet' is ungrammatical; reorder: 'because, in my case, everything depends on it.' Use present simple 'depends' for general truth.

× However, if there would be still condition that they have to live without Internet then I would definitely do the household course or I can spend my time on reading books and doing meditation.

✓ However, if there were a situation where I had to live without the Internet, I would definitely take a household course or spend my time reading books and meditating.

Use correct conditional: 'if there were' (subjunctive) or 'if I had to.' 'They have to' is wrong pronoun; should be 'I had to.' 'Do the household course' should be 'take a household course.' Use 'spend my time reading books and meditating' for parallel gerunds. Ensure conditional mood and pronoun consistency.