Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and structured. Start directly with the time you began using the internet, then add supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid redundancy such as repeating the time frame twice.

例: I started using the internet in 2016 when I was in 6th standard because my father gifted my mother a 4G phone after Jio was launched. Since then, I have been using it regularly.

提案: Your answer is relevant and clear but could be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and by varying vocabulary. Also, avoid repeating 'usually' twice in one sentence.

例: I usually go online in the evening since I attend college in the morning. During that time, I scroll through reels and chat with my friends on Instagram.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar correction. Begin with a topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific details using linking words. Also, correct grammatical errors and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, last year my teacher assigned us an activity where we were not allowed to use our phones. During that time, I was planting in the college garden, so I focused on that instead of using the internet.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid repeating 'spend' and improve sentence flow.

例: Yes, I believe I spend too much time online these days, usually around two to three hours on Instagram and Facebook. However, I plan to reduce this time in the near future.

提案: Your answer contains good ideas but needs clearer structure and grammar correction. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid unclear phrases like 'I am also fooled'. Also, be specific and concise.

例: Without the internet, I would spend my time reading books such as 'Warren Buffett Face' and 'Rich Dad, Poor Dad'. Additionally, I would go out with my friends to enjoy delicious food and socialize.

× Last year I was in college and my teacher gave a activities of not using phone to for student.

✓ Last year I was in college and my teacher gave activities of not using the phone to students.

The sentence contains errors in article usage and plural forms. 'a activities' is incorrect because 'activities' is plural and should not have 'a'. 'to for student' is incorrect; it should be 'to students' to indicate plural recipients. Also, 'the phone' is needed to specify the phone in question.

× Last year I was in college and my teacher gave a activities of not using phone to for student.

✓ Last year I was in college and my teacher gave activities of not using the phone to students.

The noun 'activities' is plural, so it should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Also, 'student' should be plural 'students' to match the context of multiple recipients.

× That was the time I started using Internet.

✓ That was the time I started using the Internet.

The word 'Internet' is a unique entity and requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× I almost spend 2 to 3 hours on Instagram and Facebook.

✓ I almost spend 2 to 3 hours on Instagram and Facebook.

No article error here; sentence is correct in this part.

× I almost spend 2 to 3 hours on Instagram and Facebook.

✓ I almost spend 2 to 3 hours on Instagram and Facebook.

The verb 'spend' should be in the present tense to match the subject 'I' and the adverb 'almost'. However, 'spend' is already in the present tense, so no correction needed here.

× I usually read book and sometime go out with my friends.

✓ I usually read books and sometimes go out with my friends.

'Book' should be plural 'books' because it refers to reading in general. 'Sometime' is an adverb meaning 'at some point' but here 'sometimes' meaning 'occasionally' is correct.

× I like to read books like Warren Buffett Face, Rich Dad, Poor dad and I am also fooled that's why I go out to have some delicious food with my friends when I am offline.

✓ I like to read books like Warren Buffett Face, Rich Dad, Poor Dad and I am also fooled; that's why I go out to have some delicious food with my friends when I am offline.

'Poor dad' should be capitalized as 'Poor Dad' as it is a title. Also, a semicolon or period is needed before 'that's why' to separate the two independent clauses.