Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and slight awkwardness, such as 'a university students' and redundancy in 'learning new skills and entertainment such as watching videos or reading articles.' Try to use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly.

例: I started using the Internet about 10 years ago when I was a university student. At that time, it wasn't free, so I mainly used it for research and studying. Nowadays, I use the Internet regularly to learn new skills and for entertainment, like watching videos and reading articles, which helps me stay informed and improve my knowledge.

提案: Your answer contains unclear and confusing phrases such as 'preparing my sex jam for my eyes like jam,' which affects clarity. Also, there are grammatical errors like 'practicing' instead of 'practice' after 'and.' Try to express your ideas clearly and check for grammar mistakes to improve coherence and naturalness.

例: I usually go online for about 5 to 10 hours a day because I am preparing for exams. I use the Internet to study, watch educational videos, and practice my skills. Besides studying, I also spend time browsing social media and reading news online.

提案: Your answer addresses the question well and provides reasons, but there are grammatical errors such as 'in university student' and awkward phrasing like 'cautious about my alternatives.' Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions to improve your answer's naturalness and effectiveness.

例: Yes, I remember about 5 or 10 years ago when I was a university student and couldn't use the Internet freely because it was very expensive. Since I had limited money, I was restricted from using it often. Also, my family was cautious about my Internet use because they believed spending too much time online could be harmful.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'remit my alternative.' Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer expressions to convey your ideas more effectively.

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, which often distracts me from my studies and reduces the time I can dedicate to learning. If I could reduce my online time a little, I would have more time to focus on my education and improve my academic performance.

提案: Your answer contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'Weather the Internet' and 'I use online platform student classes.' Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structures to make your answer clearer and more natural.

例: Without the Internet, my daily life would be much more challenging because I rely on it for studying, entertainment, and work. For instance, I use online platforms to attend classes and complete assignments. I also stay in touch with my family and friends through video calls and social media. Additionally, the Internet helps me access important information quickly, making many tasks more efficient.

× I started using the Internet around 10 years ago when I was a university students.

✓ I started using the Internet around 10 years ago when I was a university student.

The word 'students' is plural, but the subject refers to a single person, so it should be singular 'student' to match the subject.

× I use the Internet to study, watch educational videos, and practicing my skills.

✓ I use the Internet to study, watch educational videos, and practice my skills.

After 'to' in this context, the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'practicing' should be 'practice'.

× Yes, I remember time about 5 or 10 years ago when I was in university student and was not allowed to use the Internet freely because at the time Internet access was very expensive and because I had limited money, I was restricted from using it often.

✓ Yes, I remember a time about 5 or 10 years ago when I was a university student and was not allowed to use the Internet freely because at the time Internet access was very expensive and because I had limited money, I was restricted from using it often.

The phrase 'remember time' is incorrect; it should be 'remember a time' to indicate a specific occasion. Also, 'university student' should be singular to match the subject.

× which made my family more cautious about my alternatives.

✓ which made my family more cautious about my activities.

The word 'alternatives' is incorrect in this context; 'activities' better conveys the intended meaning of things the speaker does online.

× Yes, I think I spent too much time online, which often distracts me from my education and reduces the time I can dedicate to learning.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online, which often distracts me from my education and reduces the time I can dedicate to learning.

The sentence is about a current habit, so present tense 'spend' is appropriate instead of past tense 'spent'.

× If I could remit my alternative a little, I would have more time to focus on my education and improve my academic performance.

✓ If I could reduce my online time a little, I would have more time to focus on my education and improve my academic performance.

The phrase 'remit my alternative' is incorrect and unclear. 'Reduce my online time' clearly expresses the intended meaning.

× Weather the Internet, my daily life would be much more challenging because I rely on it for studying, entertainment, and work.

✓ Without the Internet, my daily life would be much more challenging because I rely on it for studying, entertainment, and work.

The word 'Weather' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'Without' to express the absence of the Internet.

× I For instance, I use online platform student classes and complete assignments, and I also stay in touch with my family and friends through video calls and social media.

✓ For instance, I use online platforms to attend classes and complete assignments, and I also stay in touch with my family and friends through video calls and social media.

The sentence has a misplaced 'I' and lacks prepositions. Correcting the structure improves clarity and grammatical correctness.