Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid repeating similar phrases. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I started using the internet when I was in 10th grade because it was a new and exciting tool for me. For example, I explored music, videos, and emails online. I even visited websites like waswaptik.com to learn more.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to give a direct response with clear time references and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

例: When I had a mobile phone, I used the internet for about one or two hours each day, although I didn't always have enough time to explore it fully.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has many hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to organize your answer clearly with correct verb tenses and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: Yes, during high school, my family did not allow me to use the internet until I passed my ACC exam. After that, they gave me permission to use it.

提案: Your answer is too long and unclear with grammatical mistakes. Try to be concise and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I spend a lot of time online, mainly using social media apps like Facebook and Instagram. Besides that, I also visit websites like Google Scholar to research scientific topics.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and has grammatical errors. Try to use clear sentence structures and avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas.

例: Without the internet, I would spend more time playing sports like football, cricket, and badminton. For example, I often go to the school field to play badminton or football depending on the season.

× When I was a student of class 10, I started to use Internet to explore the new things and new stuff.

✓ When I was a student of class 10, I started to use the Internet to explore new things and new stuff.

The word 'Internet' is a singular noun and should be preceded by the definite article 'the'. Also, 'new things' is plural and does not need 'the' before it here. Using 'the Internet' is the correct form.

× As Internet is was the newest things for me.

✓ As the Internet was the newest thing for me.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'Internet' because it is a specific noun. Also, 'things' should be singular 'thing' because 'newest' is a superlative adjective and modifies a singular noun.

× I explored many things like explore music and video, songs and emails in the Internet.

✓ I explored many things like music, videos, songs, and emails on the Internet.

The verb 'explore' should not be repeated; instead, list the objects. Also, 'video' should be plural 'videos' to match 'many things'. Preposition 'on' is correct for Internet usage.

× I also visit the first website waswaptik.com.

✓ I also visited the first website, waswaptik.com.

The verb tense should be past 'visited' to match the past context. Also, a comma is needed before the website name for clarity.

× During the time I had a mobile phone, but I don't didn't find get enough time to explore Internet.

✓ During the time I had a mobile phone, I didn't find enough time to explore the Internet.

The sentence incorrectly uses both 'don't' and 'didn't'; only 'didn't' is correct for past tense negation. Also, 'get' is unnecessary. 'The Internet' requires the definite article.

× I used to uh, use Internet for one or two hours in a day.

✓ I used to, uh, use the Internet for one or two hours a day.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'Internet'. Also, 'in a day' is better expressed as 'a day'.

× Yes, umm, I get the, I get permission from my family to use Internet when I was a student at class 11, actually, uh, during my high school life, it was strictly prohibited for me to use Internet.

✓ Yes, umm, I got permission from my family to use the Internet when I was a student in class 11. Actually, during my high school life, it was strictly prohibited for me to use the Internet.

The verb tense should be past 'got' to match the past context. 'At class 11' should be 'in class 11'. 'The Internet' requires the definite article.

× Then, uh, after uh, passing my ACC exam, I, I, I, I give, I gave up, give the permission from my family.

✓ Then, after passing my ACC exam, I was given permission from my family.

The sentence is confusing and uses incorrect verb forms. The correct passive form 'was given permission' is appropriate here. 'Give the permission' is incorrect; 'permission' is uncountable and does not need 'the' here.

× Yeah, I spend too much time in online because most of the time I always explore the social media apps like Facebook, Twitter, Instagram and so and other than I also explore too much website to find the new things for the for my research actually in Google Scholar I double explorer and science.

✓ Yeah, I spend too much time online because most of the time I explore social media apps like Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, and others. Besides that, I also explore many websites to find new things for my research, actually using Google Scholar to explore science.

'In online' is incorrect; it should be 'online'. 'Too much website' should be 'many websites' because 'website' is countable. The sentence structure is confusing and needs to be broken into clearer parts. 'Double explorer' is unclear and replaced with 'explore'.

× Without the Internet, it was the excellent things in my life because most of the time I always prefer to play many games like football, cricket and badminton.

✓ Without the Internet, it was an excellent thing in my life because most of the time I preferred to play many games like football, cricket, and badminton.

'The excellent things' is incorrect; it should be 'an excellent thing' because 'thing' is singular here. 'Prefer' should be past tense 'preferred' to match the past context.

× And whenever the Internet was not available then I always go to the school field and play badminton during that season and football during that season.

✓ And whenever the Internet was not available, I always went to the school field and played badminton during one season and football during another season.

The verbs 'go' and 'play' should be in past tense 'went' and 'played' to match the past context. The sentence is improved by clarifying the seasons.