Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Используйте более естественные выражения и избегайте грамматических ошибок. Например, используйте 'the Internet' вместо 'Internet' и избегайте повторов, таких как 'any information' и 'any music'.

例: I have been using the Internet for almost five years. It is a very useful and convenient tool for finding information, listening to music, and watching movies.

提案: Старайтесь использовать более точные и естественные выражения, избегайте ошибок в грамматике и лексике, например, 'who live far from me' вместо 'which will live far from me', и 'I buy goods' вместо 'I have any purchase'.

例: I usually go online to stay connected with my friends and relatives who live far away. Additionally, I learn new things and sometimes study online. Moreover, I buy goods like clothes and supplies through the Internet.

提案: Используйте более связные предложения и правильные предлоги, например, 'not allowed to use the Internet' и 'during classes at school'. Также старайтесь избегать повторов и улучшать связность с помощью союзов.

例: There were many times when I was not allowed to use the Internet. For example, during classes at school, the teacher preferred us not to use the Internet for tasks or homework because they wanted us to learn independently and identify our own mistakes.

提案: Избегайте неуместных слов и неполных предложений. Используйте более точные выражения, например, 'I spend too much time online on trivial things like watching videos or playing games'.

例: I think I spend too much time online on trivial things like watching videos or playing games, which is not good. Therefore, I set a timer on my phone to limit the time I spend on these activities, and it helps me manage my time better.

提案: Используйте более естественные конструкции и правильные артикли, например, 'the Internet'. Также старайтесь делать предложения более плавными и логичными.

例: I would continue living my life without the Internet since it is not a big problem for me. Although there are many advantages to using the Internet, life is still possible without it, so it wouldn't be a major issue.

× I have been using Internet for almost five years which is a long period of time.

✓ I have been using the Internet for almost five years which is a long period of time.

The word 'Internet' is a proper noun that requires the definite article 'the' before it in this context to specify the global network.

× This is an really useful and convenient app which is used to find any information, look for any music or watch movies.

✓ This is a really useful and convenient app which is used to find any information, look for any music or watch movies.

The article 'an' is used before vowel sounds, but 'really' starts with a consonant sound 'r', so 'a' should be used instead.

× I usually go online to stay connected with my friends or relatives which will live far from me.

✓ I usually go online to stay connected with my friends or relatives who live far from me.

The relative pronoun 'which' is incorrectly used for people; 'who' should be used instead. Also, 'will live' is incorrect here; simple present 'live' is appropriate for habitual situations.

× Additionally, I learn any new things online or I may study there.

✓ Additionally, I learn new things online or I may study there.

The quantifier 'any' is incorrectly used in affirmative sentences here; it should be omitted or replaced with 'some' if needed.

× Moreover, I have any purchase of goods like clothes, supplies and such thing.

✓ Moreover, I make purchases of goods like clothes, supplies and such things.

'Any' is incorrectly used in affirmative sentences. Also, 'have any purchase' is unnatural; 'make purchases' is the correct collocation. 'Such thing' should be plural 'such things' to match the plural context.

× There were many moments that I was not allowed to use Internet.

✓ There were many moments when I was not allowed to use the Internet.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'Internet'. Also, 'that' should be replaced with 'when' to refer to moments in time.

× the teacher didn't like to use Internet for doing any tasks or for the homework, and this was because they wanted us to learn ourselves and find out our mistakes.

✓ the teacher didn't like to use the Internet for doing any tasks or for homework, and this was because they wanted us to learn by ourselves and find out our mistakes.

'the Internet' requires the definite article. 'Homework' is uncountable and does not need 'the'. 'Learn ourselves' is incorrect; 'learn by ourselves' or 'learn on our own' is correct.

× I presume I spend too much time online for a nonsensical issues like watching videos or games, which is not good.

✓ I presume I spend too much time online on nonsensical issues like watching videos or playing games, which is not good.

'A' should not be used before plural 'issues'. Also, 'for' should be 'on' to indicate the activity. 'Games' should be preceded by 'playing' to indicate the action.

× I put a timer on my phone to restrict the time spent on such things, which is really good and uh, helps to solve the problem with my.

✓ I put a timer on my phone to restrict the time spent on such things, which is really good and helps solve the problem for me.

The phrase 'uh' is informal and unnecessary. 'Helps to solve' can be simplified to 'helps solve'. 'Problem with my' is incomplete; it should be 'problem for me'.

× I would continue living my life without Internet since this is not a big problem for me.

✓ I would continue living my life without the Internet since this is not a big problem for me.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'Internet'.

× There are a variety of advantages in using Internet, however, the life could be possible and without it, so this is not a big issue.

✓ There are a variety of advantages in using the Internet; however, life could be possible without it, so this is not a big issue.

The sentence has incorrect conjunction and punctuation usage. 'However' should be preceded by a semicolon or period, not a comma. 'The life' is incorrect; 'life' without 'the' is correct here. 'And without it' is unnecessary and confusing; it should be 'without it'.