Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific supporting details. Use simple and correct sentence structures to improve clarity.

例: I started using the internet during my college days. I mainly used it to complete assignments and solve problems related to mathematics and management. It also helped me with research and planning strategies.

提案: Your answer has many hesitations and unclear phrases. Try to speak more fluently and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I usually go online during my free time, especially when I have some spare hours. I use the internet to communicate with my family, friends, and loved ones. It helps me stay connected and create lasting memories.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Focus on giving a direct response with clear reasons and examples. Avoid unnecessary or unclear words and improve sentence structure.

例: Yes, when I was in school, my parents did not allow me to use the internet freely. They wanted me to focus on my studies instead of watching movies or other distractions online.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Try to express your opinion clearly with specific examples. Use varied vocabulary and avoid repeating the same words.

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. I often browse social media apps like Instagram and TikTok, watching and saving new videos, which sometimes distracts me from other important activities.

提案: Your answer includes good ideas but is disorganized and contains many hesitations. Try to organize your thoughts clearly and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Without the internet, I would spend more time reading books and visiting places like temples and parks. I would also enjoy gatherings with family and friends, which would help me stay connected in person.

× I was started in the net in my college days have were studying proposed and some brushes things are contained which is really for me to get assignment and solve some issue mathematical and management related things and also get the research strategy planning.

✓ I started using the internet in my college days when I was studying. There were some resources available which really helped me get assignments and solve some mathematical and management-related issues, and also helped with research and strategy planning.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'was started' instead of the simple past tense 'started' to indicate when the action began. Also, the sentence structure is unclear and contains tense inconsistencies. Using simple past tense 'started' and 'was studying' correctly reflects past actions. Additionally, the sentence is restructured for clarity and coherence.

× Uh, normally I go, uh, uh, to the online normally, uh, for free time or long time.

✓ Normally, I go online during my free time or for a long time.

The phrase 'to the online' is incorrect; 'go online' is the correct expression. Also, the sentence is simplified to remove unnecessary fillers and improve clarity. Present simple tense 'go' is appropriate here to describe habitual actions.

× And, uh, when I get this in, uh, lease, uh, time, then I will go to online to talk with my family, friends and, uh, my loved one, Uh, and it keeps, uh, lots of, uh, injury means and, uh, creates some memory.

✓ And when I have some free time, I go online to talk with my family, friends, and my loved ones. It keeps many memories and creates some good moments.

The original sentence has tense inconsistency and incorrect phrases like 'get this in lease time' and 'go to online'. The correction uses present simple tense for habitual actions and corrects phrases for clarity. 'Keeps lots of injury means' is unclear; replaced with 'keeps many memories' to convey intended meaning.

× When I was in school label my parents is not allowed to go to the Internet and take them a granted for celebrating some movies or watching some things and do some things.

✓ When I was in school, my parents did not allow me to use the Internet, and I took that for granted by watching some movies and doing other things.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'is not allowed' instead of past tense 'did not allow'. Also, 'take them a granted' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'take that for granted'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct tense usage.

× Yes I really take granted of Internet I will always do online and insta insta wheel and also go to Tiktok and there is also water tiktok and new videos and save it and also go for another one.

✓ Yes, I really take the Internet for granted. I am always online, using Instagram and TikTok, watching new videos, saving them, and exploring more content.

The phrase 'take granted of Internet' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'take the Internet for granted'. Also, 'insta insta wheel' and 'water tiktok' are unclear; assumed to mean Instagram and TikTok. Present continuous tense 'am always online' is used to indicate habitual action. Sentence is rephrased for clarity.

× Uh, there is lots of things to do without Internet and online, uh, systems.

✓ There are lots of things to do without the Internet and online systems.

'There is lots of things' is incorrect because 'things' is plural; it should be 'There are lots of things' (singular/plural issue). Also, 'Internet' should have the definite article 'the'.

× And there is also one things is, uh, reading books and go to, uh, somewhere, uh, to celebrate with your frame and go to the temple, uh, and go to the parks and talk with the family, uh, talk with your friends and gathering and go to the restroom.

✓ And there are also things like reading books, going somewhere to celebrate with your friends, going to the temple, going to the park, talking with family and friends, gathering, and going to the restroom.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'one things is' is incorrect (singular/plural issue), 'frame' should be 'friends' (word choice), and prepositions like 'go to the parks' should be 'go to the park' (singular/plural consistency). Also, 'talk with the family' is better as 'talking with family'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct preposition use.