Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm, cũng như sử dụng từ không chính xác (ví dụ: "viewed the Internet" thay vì "used the Internet"). Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ, đồng thời sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc hơn.

例: I started using the Internet when I was in secondary school after my family bought a new computer. Since then, I have been curious and used the Internet to explore various topics.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, cần chú ý phát âm và ngữ pháp, ví dụ "I use the Internet" thay vì "I'm also you Internet". Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

例: I go online every day because I need to do assignments and find useful information. Besides studying, I also use the Internet to relax and recharge by browsing social media.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: "emerged" thay vì "was addicted", "relied it" không đúng, "forbidden me" nên là "forbade me"). Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và chính xác hơn.

例: Yes, once I was addicted to online games, so my parents forbade me from using the Internet for a week. During that time, I felt very frustrated.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, cần chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ "I am afraid" thay vì "I afraid" và "to unwind" thay vì "for unwind". Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I use the Internet not only for studying but also to relax. Therefore, I should manage my time better to reduce my Internet use.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ "having an appointment with my friend in reality" nên là "meeting my friends in person". Hãy sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ.

例: Without the Internet, I would read books to escape the busy city life. Also, I would meet my friends in person to stay connected and maintain our relationships.

× I have viewed the Internet for ages

✓ I have used the Internet for ages

The verb 'viewed' is incorrect here because 'view' means to look at something, not to use it. The correct verb is 'used' to indicate the action of utilizing the Internet over a period of time.

× it's what are at secondary school when I had a, a new computer

✓ I started when I was at secondary school and had a new computer

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. The corrected sentence clarifies the time when the action started, using proper sentence structure and verb forms.

× I choose Internet to explore all of it

✓ I chose the Internet to explore all of it

The verb tense should be past tense 'chose' to match the past time reference. Also, 'the Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× I go online on the daily basis

✓ I go online on a daily basis

The phrase 'on the daily basis' is incorrect; the correct idiomatic expression is 'on a daily basis'.

× I'm also you Internet to unwind and recharge battery on social media

✓ I also use the Internet to unwind and recharge my energy on social media

The pronoun 'you' is incorrect here; it should be 'use'. Also, 'recharge battery' is unnatural; 'recharge my energy' or 'recharge myself' is better.

× my parents relied it and they forbidden me, forbidden me to use Internet for I think for a week

✓ my parents relied on it and they forbade me to use the Internet for, I think, a week

The verb 'relied' needs the preposition 'on'. 'Forbidden' is the past participle; the simple past 'forbade' is correct here. Also, 'the Internet' requires the definite article.

× I feel extremely stuffy

✓ I felt extremely frustrated

'Stuffy' is not appropriate to describe feelings here; 'frustrated' or 'upset' fits better. Also, past tense 'felt' matches the past time reference.

× I afraid that I have to say yes

✓ I'm afraid that I have to say yes

The verb 'am' is missing after 'I' to form the correct expression 'I'm afraid'.

× I utilize the Internet not only to study, but also for unwind and recharge battery

✓ I utilize the Internet not only to study, but also to unwind and recharge my energy

The verb form after 'also' should be 'to unwind' to parallel 'to study'. 'Recharge battery' is unnatural; 'recharge my energy' is better.

× without the Internet, I will tend to read books in order to avoid the hustle and bustle of the city on

✓ without the Internet, I will tend to read books in order to avoid the hustle and bustle of the city

The preposition 'on' at the end is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.

× having an appointment with my friend in reality in order to stay connected with them and send our rapport

✓ having an appointment with my friends in real life in order to stay connected with them and maintain our rapport

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'them'. 'In reality' is better expressed as 'in real life'. 'Send our rapport' is incorrect; 'maintain our rapport' is appropriate.