Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Постарайтесь использовать правильные грамматические структуры и избегать повторов. Например, используйте простое прошедшее время и говорите чётко без лишних слов.

例: I started using the internet in 2018.

提案: Дайте более конкретный и полный ответ, используя связующие слова для логичности. Укажите частоту и время использования интернета.

例: I usually go online from 8:00 AM until around 12:00 PM every day.

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более ясно и логично, избегая пауз и повторов. Используйте связующие слова для объяснения ситуации.

例: I remember that I was only allowed to use the internet in the evening until 6:00 PM.

提案: Расширьте ответ, объясняя причину и используя связующие слова для плавности речи.

例: Yes, I strongly believe I spend too much time online, but I am trying to reduce it by limiting my usage each day.

提案: Дайте более развернутый и связный ответ, объясняя свои мысли и чувства по поводу жизни без интернета.

例: I think life without the internet would be very difficult because I rely on it for communication and information.

× So I using sorry the Internet during a during 2018.

✓ So I started using the Internet during 2018.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I using' which is not a proper verb form. The correct form is to use the past tense verb 'started using' to indicate the action began in the past. The '-ing' form 'using' needs an auxiliary verb or a proper tense structure. Here, 'started using' fits the context better.

× Seems to me that I from 8:00 till I don't know, 12:00 PM.

✓ It seems to me that I go online from 8:00 till, I don't know, 12:00 PM.

The original sentence lacks a subject and a main verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'It' as the subject and 'go online' as the verb phrase corrects the sentence structure and clarifies the meaning.

× Well, I would say that I was allowed to think the Internet, uh, from, uh, from the, from the evening till, uh, till 6:00 PM.

✓ Well, I would say that I was allowed to use the Internet from the evening till 6:00 PM.

The phrase 'allowed to think the Internet' is incorrect; the correct modal verb usage is 'allowed to use the Internet.' 'Think' is not appropriate here. Also, unnecessary fillers and repetitions were removed for clarity.

× So I strongly believe that, but I'm trying to use it less.

✓ I strongly believe that I spend too much time online, but I'm trying to use it less.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. Adding 'I spend too much time online' completes the thought and connects properly with the following clause.

× Uh, I believe it. It's hard to deny that. But uh, I think also I can't live without it.

✓ I believe it. It's hard to deny that. But I also think I can't live without it.

The original sentence has awkward word order and unnecessary fillers. Rearranging 'I also think' improves the sentence flow and clarity.