Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如时态和介词使用不当，且表达不够自然。建议注意时态一致性，使用正确的介词，并简洁明了地表达。

例: I started using the Internet when I was 8 years old. My father bought a computer for our family, and we were allowed to use it for 10 minutes each day. That was my first experience with the Internet.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，如“use online”应为“go online”，且句子结构混乱。建议使用正确短语，注意句子连贯性。

例: Nowadays, I go online almost all the time. When I commute, I use my phone to check social media, and during class, I browse the Internet to learn new things.

提案: 句子结构混乱，语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，明确表达禁止使用互联网的时间，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: As a college student, the only time we are not allowed to use the Internet is during final exams because we need to rely on our own knowledge rather than searching online.

提案: 表达基本清楚，但有语法错误和用词不当，如“read the book”应为“read books”，且句子稍显笨拙。建议使用更自然的表达方式。

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online nowadays. I rarely have time to read books or play with others without involving online games.

提案: 回答不清晰，词汇使用错误，如“base basketball”应为“basketball”，且“intervention, my invention”表达不明。建议简化句子，明确表达想法。

例: Without the Internet, I would like to play basketball with my friends, but nowadays, few people enjoy playing outside with me.

× I start using the Internet when I was 8 years old.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was 8 years old.

这里描述的是过去发生的动作，动词应使用过去式。"start"应改为过去式"started"。

× My father bought a computer to my family and we can use it 10 minutes per day.

✓ My father bought a computer for my family and we could use it for 10 minutes per day.

动词"bought"后应使用介词"for"表示受益对象。"can"表示现在能力，描述过去应使用过去式"could"。时间表达前应加介词"for"。

× Nowadays I use online every time and every moment.

✓ Nowadays I go online all the time.

"use online"搭配不当，应使用"go online"表示上网。"every time and every moment"表达重复且不自然，改为"all the time"更简洁。

× When I am commute I use my phone to watch the social media and in the class I use the online to surf some knowledge.

✓ When I am commuting, I use my phone to check social media, and in class I use the internet to look up some information.

"commute"应使用动名词"commuting"表示正在进行的动作。"watch the social media"搭配错误，应为"check social media"。"in the class"应为"in class"。"use the online"表达错误，应为"use the internet"。"surf some knowledge"表达不自然，改为"look up some information"更合适。

× For college student, the only a moment that we are not allowed to use the Internet is in the middle of final exam which we should use our brain to get the answer not using not go on the Internet.

✓ For college students, the only time we are not allowed to use the Internet is during the final exam, when we should use our brains to get the answers instead of going online.

"college student"应为复数"college students"。"the only a moment"表达重复，应为"the only time"。"in the middle of final exam"应为"during the final exam"。"use our brain"应为复数"brains"。"not using not go on the Internet"表达混乱，改为"instead of going online"更清晰。

× Yes, I really think I spend too much time online now.

✓ Yes, I really think I spend too much time online now.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× I seldom have the time to read the book or play with others without online game.

✓ I seldom have time to read books or play with others without online games.

"the time"前不需要定冠词，改为"time"。"the book"应为复数"books"。"online game"应为复数"online games"。

× I would like to play base basketball with my friend, but now seldom people would enjoy my intervention, my invention.

✓ I would like to play basketball with my friends, but now few people would enjoy my intervention, my invention.

"base basketball"表达错误，应为"basketball"。"my friend"应为复数"my friends"。"seldom people"搭配错误，应为"few people"。