Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول تحسين الطلاقة وتقليل الترددات مثل "uh" و"um". استخدم جمل واضحة ومترابطة مع تفاصيل محددة حول متى وكيف بدأت استخدام الإنترنت.

例: I started using the internet right after I finished high school because I needed it for my university studies. It helped me find information, improve my writing and reading skills, and complete academic assignments effectively.

提案: تجنب التكرار وكن أكثر دقة في التعبير. استخدم جمل كاملة وواضحة مع ربط الأفكار بشكل منطقي.

例: I go online every day because I often shop and sell items through the internet. It is a convenient way for me to manage my purchases and sales.

提案: حاول استخدام جمل أكثر تنظيماً وتجنب الأخطاء النحوية. وضح موقفاً محدداً مع أمثلة واضحة عن استخدام الإنترنت بشكل إيجابي.

例: Yes, my family sometimes restricts my internet use to prevent me from accessing harmful content. They encourage me to use the internet only for positive purposes like shopping or learning new things.

提案: حاول تنظيم الأفكار بشكل أفضل واستخدام جمل كاملة. اشرح أسباب قضاء وقت طويل على الإنترنت مع أمثلة واضحة.

例: I think I spend a lot of time online because I need it for various tasks. For example, I write and submit my projects online, which requires me to be connected frequently.

提案: حاول التعبير بشكل أكثر وضوحاً وترتيب الأفكار. استخدم جمل كاملة مع أمثلة عن أهمية الإنترنت في حياتك.

例: I cannot imagine living without the internet because it is essential for communication, social interaction, and completing schoolwork nowadays.

× I started using the Internet when I finished uh school because I needed it in the my university.

✓ I started using the Internet when I finished school because I needed it at my university.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'my university'. Possessive pronouns like 'my' do not require 'the' before them. Also, 'in the my university' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at' for institutions like universities.

× It helps me uh, to finding information and uh information uh, writing and proof writing skills and reading.

✓ It helps me to find information and improve my writing, proofreading skills, and reading.

After 'helps me', the verb should be in the infinitive form 'to find', not the gerund 'finding'. Also, the sentence structure is unclear; 'proof writing' should be 'proofreading', and the list should be parallel and clear.

× Academic Internet is very important baby.

✓ Academic internet is very important, basically.

The word 'baby' is incorrect here; likely the speaker meant 'basically'. Also, 'Internet' should not be capitalized unless referring to the global network; 'academic internet' is a general term.

× I often do you online every every day.

✓ I often go online every day.

The phrase 'do you online' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'go online'. Also, 'every every day' is repetitive; only one 'every' is needed.

× I used it because I order something and I sold them.

✓ I use it because I order things and sell them.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the question is about frequency, present tense 'use', 'order', and 'sell' should be used. Also, 'something' should be plural 'things' to match 'them'.

× Yes, of course my family don't allow me to use the bad thing in Internet.

✓ Yes, of course my family doesn't allow me to use bad things on the Internet.

'Don't' should be 'doesn't' to agree with singular subject 'family'. 'The bad thing' should be plural 'bad things' without 'the'. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'on' when referring to the Internet.

× Tell me you the Internet for positive thing.

✓ They tell me to use the Internet for positive things.

The sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'Tell me you the Internet' is incorrect; it should be 'They tell me to use the Internet'. Also, 'positive thing' should be plural 'positive things'.

× For example buy something or learn learn something or use it for.

✓ For example, to buy something, learn something, or use it for other purposes.

After 'for example', infinitive forms 'to buy', 'to learn' are appropriate. The repetition 'learn learn' is an error. The sentence is incomplete and needs clarification.

× I think spend too much time online because I needed it anytime to use something.

✓ I think I spend too much time online because I need it anytime to use something.

The verb 'spend' needs the subject 'I'. 'Needed' should be present tense 'need' to match 'I think'. The phrase 'to use something' is vague but kept as is.

× I write my project online and I send it.

✓ I write my projects online and send them.

The sentence is grammatically correct but can be improved for clarity and conciseness by pluralizing 'project' and using 'send them'.

× But when I use when I spend.

✓ But sometimes I spend too much time online.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. A complete sentence expressing the intended meaning is provided.

× I don't live without the Internet because the Internet nowadays is very important for many things and.

✓ I can't live without the Internet because it is very important nowadays for many things.

'Don't live' should be 'can't live' to express inability. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and', which is removed for completeness.

× How to how to communicate with others and how to interact with others and the school need the the Internet.

✓ It helps me communicate and interact with others, and schools need the Internet.

The sentence is repetitive and ungrammatical. 'How to how to' is incorrect. The corrected sentence is clearer and grammatically correct.