Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，且句子结构较简单。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意冠词和时态的正确使用。

例: I started using the internet when I was in elementary school because we had computer lessons that required internet access.

提案: 回答中时态混乱，表达不流畅。建议使用正确的时态，并避免重复和犹豫词汇，使回答更自然连贯。

例: When I was a child, I went online two or three times a week, but now I use the internet every day.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议简洁明了地表达观点，注意主谓一致和时态。

例: When I was a student, my parents often didn't allow me to use the internet because they wanted me to focus on studying. I felt a bit annoyed because I wanted to play games and chat with my friends.

提案: 回答内容较丰富，但表达有些重复且语法不够准确。建议使用更地道的表达，避免重复，并注意冠词和介词的使用。

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. Nowadays, I rely on the internet for many things, such as searching for information, chatting with friends, or watching movies to relax.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够流畅。建议简洁表达，注意动词形式和句子结构，使回答更自然。

例: If I couldn't use the internet, I would spend more time outdoors, like hiking or visiting museums. I would prefer activities without phones or computers to help me focus better on my studies.

× In my memory, I started using the Internet when I was a elementary student.

✓ In my memory, I started using the Internet when I was an elementary student.

冠词使用错误，'elementary' 前应使用不定冠词 'an'，因为它以元音音素开头。

× We need to learn the on computer lessons, so I use the Internet in the computer class.

✓ We need to learn computer lessons, so I use the Internet in the computer class.

'learn the on computer lessons' 中 'the on' 用法错误，应去掉 'the on'，直接说 'learn computer lessons'。

× When I was a child I use online uh twice or third time uh for a week.

✓ When I was a child I used online uh twice or three times uh per week.

时态错误，描述过去的动作应使用过去时 'used'，且 'third time' 应改为 'three times'，'for a week' 应改为 'per week'。

× But when I grow up I used Internet every day.

✓ But when I grew up I used the Internet every day.

'grow' 应用过去式 'grew'，且 'Internet' 前应加定冠词 'the'。

× my parents wanted to me study hard, but I it uh, but I couldn't use Internet.

✓ my parents wanted me to study hard, but I couldn't use the Internet.

'wanted to me study' 结构错误，应为 'wanted me to study'，且 'Internet' 前应加定冠词 'the'。

× I was a little annoyed because I want to play the computer game and chat with my friend.

✓ I was a little annoyed because I wanted to play computer games and chat with my friends.

时态不一致，前句为过去时，后句应改为过去时 'wanted'；'the computer game' 应改为复数 'computer games'；'my friend' 应改为复数 'my friends'。

× Yes, I think I actually spent too much time online.

✓ Yes, I think I actually spend too much time online.

此句表达现在的观点，应使用现在时 'spend' 而非过去时 'spent'。

× You can say I couldn't live without the online.

✓ You can say I couldn't live without the internet.

'the online' 用法错误，应使用 'the internet'。

× Now I need to use the online to do anything, for example search the information, chat with my friend or just use the Internet to watch the movie to relax myself.

✓ Now I need to use the internet to do anything, for example search for information, chat with my friends or just use the Internet to watch movies to relax myself.

'the online' 应改为 'the internet'；'search the information' 应为 'search for information'；'my friend' 应为复数 'my friends'；'the movie' 应为复数 'movies'。

× If I couldn't use the Internet, I would want to go outside, such as hiking the mountain or visit the museum.

✓ If I couldn't use the Internet, I would want to go outside, such as hiking the mountain or visiting the museum.

'such as hiking the mountain or visit the museum' 中 'visit' 应改为动名词 'visiting'，保持并列结构一致。

× I prefer to, uh, doing something without the cell phone or computer to, uh, let me focus on the, uh, lecture.

✓ I prefer to, uh, do something without the cell phone or computer to, uh, let me focus on the, uh, lecture.

'prefer to doing' 结构错误，应为 'prefer to do'。