Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中有较多的语气词和重复，影响流畅性。建议减少填充词，句子结构更完整，表达更自然。可以简洁明了地说明开始使用互联网的时间和原因。

例: I started using the internet about 10 years ago when I was in middle school because we had a computer course that required us to find information online and learn typing skills.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，且有较多填充词。建议使用正确的词汇和句式，避免重复，表达更准确。

例: I go online several times a day because nowadays we use the internet for many things, such as chatting with friends and family on WeChat, QQ, or Instagram, and watching TV shows.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但语法和句子结构不够准确。建议使用完整句子，注意时态和语法，表达更自然。

例: I remember during our final exam, the teacher did not allow us to use the internet. She told us to only read the book until we finished the exam.

提案: 回答中有重复和语气词，表达不够流畅。建议简洁明了地说明原因，避免重复，使用连贯的句子。

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I need to find information, chat with friends, and do my homework.

提案: 回答内容丰富，但有语法错误和表达不够自然。建议注意单复数和词汇搭配，句子更流畅自然。

例: Without the internet, I would spend more time doing outdoor and social activities, such as hiking or climbing mountains with my friends and family to enjoy the fresh air. Sometimes, I would also choose to read books.

× Well, I guess maybe it's 10 years ago when I, uh, started in the middle school because, uh, we have the computer course we need to, uh, we need to find some information, uh, online and we need to know how to type in and.

✓ Well, I guess maybe it was 10 years ago when I, uh, started in middle school because, uh, we had a computer course where we needed to, uh, find some information, uh, online and we needed to know how to type.

这里描述的是过去的时间点“10 years ago”，所以动词时态应使用过去式。原句中“it's”应改为“it was”，“have”应改为“had”，“need”应改为“needed”，以保持时态一致。

× Well, I mean, uh, I go to a lot every day and every time because nowadays, uh, we need to use foam to do everything like chat with your friend, family in, uh, in the WeChat or QQ or Instagram and we would use the social activity to watch some TV show.

✓ Well, I mean, uh, I go online a lot every day and every time because nowadays, uh, we need to use apps to do everything like chat with your friends, family in, uh, WeChat or QQ or Instagram and we use social media to watch some TV shows.

“go to a lot”表达不正确，应为“go online a lot”。“foam”应为“apps”或“platforms”。“friend”应为复数“friends”，因为通常是和多个朋友聊天。“social activity”应为“social media”，“TV show”应为复数“TV shows”，表示多种节目。

× I remember last time, uh, we did the final exam and our teacher, uh, did not allow to use the Internet. Uh, she said we need to, we just can read the book until finish the exam.

✓ I remember last time, uh, we did the final exam and our teacher, uh, did not allow us to use the Internet. Uh, she said we could only read the book until we finished the exam.

“did not allow to use”缺少宾语，应为“did not allow us to use”。“we just can read”时态和语气不正确，应为“we could only read”。“until finish”缺少主语，应为“until we finished”。

× I would say yes. I mean I use a lot of time online. The main reason is I need to use uh, I, I need to go online to find some information and chat with my friend and do homework. So everything I need to go online so, so I mean.

✓ I would say yes. I mean I spend a lot of time online. The main reason is I need to go online to find some information, chat with my friends, and do homework. So everything I do needs the internet, so, so I mean.

“use a lot of time”表达不准确，应为“spend a lot of time”。“chat with my friend”应为复数“friends”，因为通常是和多个朋友聊天。句子结构也做了适当调整，使表达更自然。

× Wow, that's a good question. Umm, there are a lot of outdoor activity and social activity, uh, we can do, for example, go hiking or climb the mountain with your friend and family to kill the time and brave the fresh air. And sometime I would choose to read.

✓ Wow, that's a good question. Umm, there are a lot of outdoor activities and social activities, uh, we can do, for example, go hiking or climb mountains with your friends and family to kill time and enjoy the fresh air. And sometimes I would choose to read.

“a lot of outdoor activity and social activity”应为复数“activities”，因为指多种活动。“climb the mountain”改为“climb mountains”更自然且泛指多座山。“your friend”应为复数“your friends”。“kill the time”应为“kill time”，“brave the fresh air”表达不当，应为“enjoy the fresh air”。“sometime”应为副词复数形式“sometimes”。