Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول تحسين وضوح إجاباتك وتجنب الأخطاء اللغوية التي تؤثر على الفهم. استخدم جمل واضحة ومترابطة مع تفاصيل محددة لدعم إجابتك.

例: I started using the Internet when I was about eight years old. My parents gave me a phone and taught me how to use the Internet safely. Since then, it has been very useful for finding information for school and keeping in touch with my friends.

提案: حاول استخدام روابط بين الجمل لجعل إجابتك أكثر ترابطًا، وكن دقيقًا في استخدام الأزمنة والأفعال لتجنب الأخطاء.

例: I go online almost every day because I use the Internet for many purposes, such as checking emails, browsing social media, and searching for information on Google. Usually, I spend a few hours online, especially in the evening when I have free time. Therefore, the Internet is very useful for both work and entertainment.

提案: حاول تنظيم أفكارك بشكل أوضح واستخدم جمل كاملة وصحيحة نحويًا. قدم تفاصيل محددة مع استخدام روابط لتوضيح أفكارك.

例: I can't remember a specific time when I was not allowed to use the Internet. However, during school exams, teachers usually restrict Internet access to prevent cheating. This helps me focus better and avoid distractions.

提案: حاول تحسين تركيب الجمل واستخدام كلمات مناسبة لتوضيح أفكارك بشكل أفضل. استخدم روابط بين الجمل لتسهيل الفهم.

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, especially because I often use social media and watch videos. Sometimes, this affects my productivity and makes it hard to focus on other tasks. However, I try to limit my screen time by setting specific hours for Internet use.

提案: حاول استخدام مفردات أكثر دقة وتجنب الأخطاء اللغوية. قدم أمثلة واضحة مع ربط الأفكار بشكل منطقي.

例: If I didn't have the Internet, I would find it very difficult to communicate with my friends and family because most of us use social media. Also, I rely on the Internet for information and entertainment, so life would be more confusing and boring without it.

× I started using the Internet when I was a child round the egg of the egg.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was a child around the age of eight.

The phrase 'round the egg of the egg' is incorrect and seems to be a mispronunciation or typo. The correct phrase is 'around the age of eight' to indicate approximate age in the past.

× My burn gave me a phone and taught me how to use the Internet carefully and safely send them.

✓ My parents gave me a phone and taught me how to use the Internet carefully and safely.

The word 'burn' is incorrect; it should be 'parents'. Also, 'send them' is unnecessary and unclear in this context, so it is removed for clarity.

× Usually I spend a few hours online, especially in the evening when I was free time.

✓ Usually I spend a few hours online, especially in the evening when I have free time.

The phrase 'when I was free time' is incorrect because 'was' is past tense and 'free time' is a noun phrase. The correct form is 'when I have free time' to indicate habitual present action.

× Use the Internet yes.

✓ Yes, I use the Internet.

The original sentence lacks proper sentence structure and modal verb usage. Starting with 'Yes' and then the subject and verb forms a correct affirmative sentence.

× I can't remember a time when I I won't allowed to use the Internet.

✓ I can't remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet.

The phrase 'I won't allowed' is incorrect. The correct past negative form is 'I wasn't allowed' to indicate prohibition in the past.

× For example, during my school exam the teacher risked their kid Internet access to brief and cheating the this helped me focus better and avoid distracting.

✓ For example, during my school exams, the teacher restricted students' Internet access to prevent cheating. This helped me focus better and avoid distractions.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'risked' should be 'restricted'; 'their kid Internet access' is incorrect, should be 'students' Internet access'; 'to brief and cheating' is unclear, corrected to 'to prevent cheating'; 'the this' is redundant; 'avoid distracting' should be 'avoid distractions'.

× Yes, I think do spend too much time online, especially because I use social media and watch video frequently from sometimes this affect my productivity and I find it hard to focus on other tasks.

✓ Yes, I think I do spend too much time online, especially because I use social media and watch videos frequently. Sometimes this affects my productivity and I find it hard to focus on other tasks.

The sentence has missing subject 'I' after 'think'; 'watch video' should be plural 'watch videos'; 'from sometimes' is incorrect and removed; 'affect' should be 'affects' to agree with singular subject 'this'.

× However, I try to limited me my screen time by setting specific hours for Internet use.

✓ However, I try to limit my screen time by setting specific hours for Internet use.

The phrase 'try to limited me my screen time' is incorrect. The correct form is 'try to limit my screen time' using the base form of the verb after 'try to' and removing unnecessary pronouns.

× If I didn't have the Internet, I would find it very difficult to communicate with my friends and my family because most of us use social media.

✓ If I didn't have the Internet, I would find it very difficult to communicate with my friends and my family because most of us use social media.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the conditional tense properly, so no correction is needed.

× Also, I rely on the Internet for information and entertainment, so it would be less confused and more boring without it.

✓ Also, I rely on the Internet for information and entertainment, so it would be more confusing and more boring without it.

The adjective 'confused' is incorrectly used to describe the situation; the correct adjective is 'confusing' to describe something that causes confusion.