Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول تحسين تركيب الجمل واستخدام كلمات صحيحة مثل 'information' بدلاً من 'informations'. كما يجب تقليل التردد والكلمات الزائدة لجعل الإجابة أكثر طبيعية وفعالية.

例: I started using the Internet when I was a child. My parents gave me a phone, and I used it to research information on various topics to learn more.

提案: حاول استخدام جمل أكثر وضوحًا وتنظيمًا مع تقليل التردد. استخدم كلمات صحيحة مثل 'information' بدلاً من 'informations' وعبّر عن التكرار بشكل طبيعي.

例: I usually go online three times a day to research information and also to order some things.

提案: حاول تحسين وضوح الجمل وترتيبها، واستخدم عبارات أكثر طبيعية للتعبير عن منع استخدام الإنترنت. قلل من التردد والكلمات غير الضرورية.

例: Yes, I remember a time when my parents took my phone away because I saw some inappropriate content online.

提案: حاول استخدام جمل أكثر تماسكًا مع ربط الأفكار بشكل منطقي. استخدم كلمات صحيحة مثل 'information' وعبّر عن السبب بوضوح.

例: Yes, I spend a lot of time online because I love researching fresh and free information.

提案: حاول التعبير عن الأفكار بشكل أكثر وضوحًا وتنظيمًا، وتجنب التكرار والكلمات غير الضرورية. استخدم كلمات صحيحة وعبارات طبيعية.

例: I can't imagine living without the Internet because I rely on it to get information all the time.

× I started using the Internet when I was child, uh, my parents give me, uh, your phones and I research, uh, some informations about, uh, any topics, uh, to, to get, uh, full, uh, informations.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was a child, uh, my parents gave me, uh, your phone and I researched, uh, some information about, uh, any topics, uh, to, to get, uh, full, uh, information.

The word 'child' is singular and requires the article 'a' before it. 'Give' should be in past tense 'gave' to match the past context. 'Phones' should be singular 'phone' as it refers to one device. 'Informations' is incorrect because 'information' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. 'Research' should be in past tense 'researched' to match the past context.

× Actually, I often do, uh, go online, uh, three times a whole uh, the day I want to research uh, many informations about the Internet, uh, also I, I order some things.

✓ Actually, I often go online, uh, three times a day. I want to research, uh, much information about the Internet, uh, also I, I order some things.

The phrase 'three times a whole the day' is incorrect; it should be 'three times a day'. 'Informations' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable and does not have a plural form. 'Many' should be replaced with 'much' when referring to uncountable nouns like 'information'.

× Yeah, yeah, I remember a time when I was allowed to use the Internet, when I saw bad things. My parents. Take my phone and say the no no no not follow.

✓ Yeah, yeah, I remember a time when I was not allowed to use the Internet because I saw bad things. My parents took my phone and said no, no, no, do not follow.

The sentence 'I was allowed' should be 'I was not allowed' to match the context. 'Take' should be in past tense 'took' and 'say' should be 'said' to match past tense. The phrase 'the no no no not follow' is unclear and corrected to 'no, no, no, do not follow' for clarity.

× Of course, I spend my time too much because I love to research a lot of information online I want to get. A fresh information or free information?

✓ Of course, I spend too much time because I love to research a lot of information online. I want to get fresh or free information.

The phrase 'spend my time too much' is incorrect; it should be 'spend too much time'. 'A fresh information' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Wow, it is amazing questions. I don't live without Internet. I like using Internet every time because because when without the Internet I can't get any informations and I I can't.

✓ Wow, that is an amazing question. I can't live without the Internet. I like using the Internet all the time because without the Internet I can't get any information and I can't.

The phrase 'it is amazing questions' is incorrect; it should be 'that is an amazing question' to match singular. 'Don't live' should be 'can't live' to express inability. 'Using Internet every time' is corrected to 'using the Internet all the time'. 'Informations' is incorrect; 'information' is uncountable. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.