Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，句子结构不完整，且部分内容重复。建议注意句子完整性，避免断句，使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I started using the internet when I was very young because I am a digital native. As technology has advanced, the internet has become a great platform for communication, helping me stay connected with my friends even when we are not face to face.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如动词单复数不一致，表达略显口语化且不够连贯。建议使用更准确的语法和连接词，使表达更流畅自然。

例: I usually go online several times a day to check messages or watch short videos on Instagram reels. These activities help me relax and unwind after a busy day.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，表达不清晰且情绪描述不完整。建议使用完整句子，清晰表达原因和感受，避免口语化和不连贯的表达。

例: I remember when I was addicted to the internet, my academic performance dropped significantly. Therefore, my parents limited my internet use, which made me feel very upset and I even cried.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但句子结构简单，部分表达重复。建议丰富句型，使用连接词使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, about three hours a day. I realize this is quite a lot, so I am trying to reduce my screen time and focus more on improving my academic results.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和不完整的表达，且有口语填充词。建议避免使用口语填充词，注意句子完整性和准确表达。

例: Even though I am a digital native, I enjoy sports. Without the internet, I would spend more time playing basketball and football with my friends, which helps strengthen our friendship and improves my physical and emotional health.

× New generation like me used Internet in a very young age.

✓ The new generation like me used the Internet at a very young age.

“New generation”前缺少定冠词“the”，且“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”，表示特指互联网。此外，“in a very young age”应改为“at a very young age”，因为表示年龄时用介词“at”。

× Since the technology is becoming more and more advanced.

✓ Since technology is becoming more and more advanced.

“technology”作为不可数名词，前面不需要加定冠词“the”。

× So I trust Internet is a very good platform for people to communicate without face to face.

✓ So I trust the Internet is a very good platform for people to communicate without face to face.

“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”，表示特指互联网。

× It can strengthen our bonding between me and my friends.

✓ It can strengthen the bond between me and my friends.

“bonding”是动名词，表示动作；此处应使用名词“bond”表示关系，且“bond”前加定冠词“the”。

× I quite usually go online in order to check our message or see the IG reels, which is, uh, short videos in the platform.

✓ I quite usually go online to check our messages or see the IG reels, which are short videos on the platform.

“quite usually”顺序不自然，应改为“quite usually”或“usually”。“message”应为复数“messages”。“which is”指代复数应为“which are”。“in the platform”应改为“on the platform”。

× It can really makes me feel relaxed and just chill.

✓ It can really make me feel relaxed and just chill.

情态动词“can”后动词用原形，“makes”应改为“make”。

× I was really addicted into the Internet and it lets my academic results drop very significantly.

✓ I was really addicted to the Internet and it caused my academic results to drop significantly.

“addicted”后应接介词“to”，而非“into”。“lets”用法不当，改为“caused”更合适。

× And I was really ****** ***. And I will I was like keep crying.

✓ And I was really upset. I kept crying.

原句结构混乱，缺少完整表达。应简化为“I was really upset. I kept crying.”以表达情绪和动作。

× I spend 3 hours per day.

✓ I spend 3 hours per day.

此句无语法错误，符合语法规则。

× I know it sounds like very a lot and I'm trying to use less and try to focus on my academic result in order to have a better result.

✓ I know it sounds like a lot and I'm trying to use less and try to focus on my academic results in order to have better results.

“very a lot”顺序错误，应为“a lot”。“result”应为复数“results”，表示多次成绩。

× Without using my phone, I like to play basketball and football with my friends.

✓ Without using my phone, I like to play basketball and football with my friends.

此句无语法错误，符合语法规则。

× It can really uh, strengthen the bonding between me and my friend, and you can strengthen my AC umm, physical and emotional.

✓ It can really strengthen the bond between me and my friends, and it can strengthen my physical and emotional health.

“bonding”应改为名词“bond”。“friend”应为复数“friends”。“you can strengthen my AC umm, physical and emotional”表达不清，改为“it can strengthen my physical and emotional health”更准确。