Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 文法の誤り（例えば、"2 year" は "2nd year" または "second year" に修正、"started to using" は "started using" に修正）を直し、より自然な表現にしましょう。また、具体的な興味のジャンルを明示すると良いです。

例: I started using the internet when I was a second-year elementary school student. I mainly used it to research topics that interested me, such as animals and science.

提案: "use online SMS" は不自然なので、"send messages online" や "use messaging apps" に直しましょう。また、理由を明確にし、文を簡潔にまとめることが大切です。

例: I go online every day because I have a smartphone and enjoy chatting with my friends through messaging apps.

提案: 文法と語彙の誤りが多いので、正しい時制と単語を使いましょう。また、質問に直接答え、具体的な状況を説明すると良いです。

例: I can't remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the internet. Without it, life would be very difficult because I use it for many daily tasks.

提案: "appreciate time" は不自然なので、"appropriate amount of time" に直しましょう。また、理由を明確にし、文法を正しく使うことが重要です。

例: No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I set limits for myself. This helps me focus on other important things.

提案: "Ann arrow games" は意味不明なので、正しい単語（"play offline games" など）に直しましょう。また、文法と語順を改善し、具体的な活動を明確に述べることが必要です。

例: Without the internet, I would play offline games such as puzzles and board games, and spend time playing outside. I want to enjoy life even without the internet.

× When I was 2 year elementary school student, I started to using the Internet by researching my interesting genre.

✓ When I was a 2-year elementary school student, I started using the Internet by researching my interesting genre.

The phrase '2 year elementary school student' lacks the plural form for 'year' and the article 'a' before it. Also, 'started to using' is incorrect; it should be 'started using'. The correct form is 'a 2-year elementary school student' and 'started using'.

× When I was 2 year elementary school student, I started to using the Internet by researching my interesting genre.

✓ When I was a 2-year elementary school student, I started using the Internet by researching my interesting genre.

After 'started', the verb should be in the '-ing' form without 'to'. So, 'started to using' is incorrect; it should be 'started using'.

× I use online SMS every day because I have a smartphone and I enjoy it many times.

✓ I use online SMS every day because I have a smartphone and I enjoy it a lot.

The phrase 'enjoy it many times' is unnatural. The correct expression is 'enjoy it a lot' to indicate frequent enjoyment. Also, 'use online SMS' is acceptable but could be clearer as 'use online messaging services'. However, this is not a grammar problem per the list.

× I couldn't remember a time that I don't have a Internet things and if it were not for Internet, the lifestyle is very challenging.

✓ I couldn't remember a time when I didn't have Internet access, and if it were not for the Internet, life would be very challenging.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. 'Don't have' should be 'didn't have' to match past tense. 'A Internet things' is incorrect; 'Internet access' or 'Internet' is better. Also, 'lifestyle is very challenging' should be 'life would be very challenging' to express a hypothetical situation.

× I couldn't remember a time that I don't have a Internet things and if it were not for Internet, the lifestyle is very challenging.

✓ I couldn't remember a time when I didn't have Internet access, and if it were not for the Internet, life would be very challenging.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'Internet' when referring to it generally. Also, 'a Internet things' is incorrect; 'Internet access' is more appropriate.

× No, I think that I can spend appreciate time online because I set a limiting time to use Internet.

✓ No, I think that I can spend appropriate time online because I set a time limit to use the Internet.

'Appreciate time' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'appropriate'. 'A limiting time' is unnatural; 'a time limit' is the correct phrase. Also, 'use Internet' should be 'use the Internet'.

× No, I think that I can spend appreciate time online because I set a limiting time to use Internet.

✓ No, I think that I can spend appropriate time online because I set a time limit to use the Internet.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'Internet' when referring to it generally.

× It is very useful to concentrate something.

✓ It is very useful to concentrate on something.

The verb 'concentrate' requires the preposition 'on' to indicate the object of concentration.

× I would Ann arrow games such as puzzle games, board games and playing in the ground.

✓ I would play games such as puzzle games, board games, and play outside on the ground.

'Ann arrow games' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. The sentence structure is awkward. 'Playing in the ground' is incorrect; 'play outside on the ground' is better. Also, the verb 'would' should be followed by the base form 'play'.

× I want to be a person who can enjoy without Internet.

✓ I want to be a person who can enjoy life without the Internet.

The verb 'enjoy' requires an object; 'enjoy without Internet' is incomplete. Adding 'life' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'the Internet' requires the definite article.