Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，影响理解。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和表达方式，避免使用不恰当的词汇，如“degeneration”。

例: I started using the internet when I was about three years old. I think it was an advantage because I could access a lot of information early on compared to other generations.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清的问题，句子不连贯。建议使用完整句子，注意动词形式和连接词的使用，使表达更自然流畅。

例: I go online almost every day. I usually spend time playing digital games and researching travel destinations because I enjoy going abroad and seeing new places different from my country.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但部分表达不够地道。建议使用更自然的表达方式，如“had to stop using the internet”代替“give up my time of using Internet”，并注意冠词和复数形式。

例: Yes, I remember in grade 9, because of exams, my mom didn't allow me to play digital games or watch videos, so I had to stop using the internet and focus on studying.

提案: 回答语法错误严重，表达不清，影响理解。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，避免使用错误的词汇和结构。

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, especially because I am addicted to some apps. This limits my time for reading books or exercising.

提案: 回答简短且缺乏连贯性。建议使用完整句子，适当使用连接词，使回答更自然流畅。

例: If I didn't have the internet, I would exercise, read books, chat with my friends, or play outside.

× About 3 years old.

✓ I started using the internet at about 3 years old.

原句缺少主语和谓语，导致句子结构不完整。应补充完整句子，使其表达清晰。

× I get in touch with the Internet in a very early age so I can grab much information on it.

✓ I got in touch with the Internet at a very early age so I could get much information from it.

介词使用错误，表示年龄应使用'at'，而非'in'。此外，动词时态应与上下文一致。

× I think that's an advantage than other generations.

✓ I think that's an advantage over other generations.

'advantage'后应使用介词'over'表示比较，而非'than'。

× Roy Often, nearly every day, I think I focus on digital games and traveling these two channels because I like go abroad and see something new, which is different to my country.

✓ Very often, nearly every day. I think I focus on digital games and traveling because I like to go abroad and see something new, which is different from my country.

'Roy Often'应为'Very often'，'like go'应为'like to go'，'different to'应为'different from'，这些都是常见的词汇和介词搭配错误。

× Because of the examination, my mom didn't allow me to play digital games and watch videos, so I had to give up my time of using Internet and focus on the study.

✓ Because of the examination, my mom didn't allow me to play digital games and watch videos, so I had to give up my time using the Internet and focus on my studies.

'time of using Internet'表达不自然，应改为'time using the Internet'，'the study'应为复数形式'my studies'。

× Yes, actually is, especially the addiction of the application I used on the Internet, so I always see limitations to myself and replace the tongue when the book reading or exercising.

✓ Yes, actually I do, especially the addiction to the applications I use on the Internet, so I always set limits for myself and replace screen time with reading books or exercising.

原句中缺少主语，'addiction of'应为'addiction to'，'see limitations to myself'表达错误，应为'set limits for myself'，'replace the tongue'是错误表达，应为'replace screen time'。

× Like I said before, well, exercising or reading a book or chatting with my friends or playing outside.

✓ Like I said before, I would exercise, read a book, chat with my friends, or play outside.

原句缺少主语和谓语，导致句子不完整，应补充完整句子使表达清晰。