Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不够自然，如“because of the Olympics was held in Beijing”应改为“because the Olympics were held in Beijing”。建议注意时态和主谓一致，避免冗余表达。

例: I started using the internet in 2008 when I was 8 years old. The Beijing Olympics were held that year, and I watched the live broadcast online for the first time. That experience made me interested in using the internet more.

提案: 回答重复“every day”，且表达不够清晰，如“needs to cause the scientific research of others”不符合语法和逻辑。建议简洁明了地表达原因，并注意句子结构。

例: I go online every day because, as a clinical medical student, I need to search for academic papers to support my dissertation research.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达混乱，如“Sure I can't”和“forbid the students to bring the firms”不正确。建议理清思路，使用正确的表达方式，并避免句子不完整。

例: Yes, I remember in high school, the school did not allow students to bring phones into the campus, so I couldn't use the internet during school hours.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不连贯，如“life of pace”应为“pace of life”，且句子结构不完整。建议使用连贯的句子表达观点，并注意词汇搭配。

例: I don't think I spend too much time online. With the fast pace of life nowadays, using the internet to find accurate and updated information is very efficient.

提案: 回答中有词汇和语法错误，如“birds are probably do some meditations”和“made playing basketball”不正确。建议使用正确的词汇和句型，表达清晰完整。

例: Without the internet, I would probably do some meditation, which is one of my hobbies. It helps me relax and think deeply. I would also play basketball with my friends to strengthen our friendship.

× I first came across the Internet because of the Olympics was held in Beijing.

✓ I first came across the Internet because the Olympics were held in Beijing.

句子中主语是复数的'Olympics'，谓语动词应使用复数形式'were'，而不是单数'was'。这是过去时态中主谓一致的问题。

× I'd watched the live broadcast via the Internet for the first time, and I remember that's the first time I used the Internet.

✓ I watched the live broadcast via the Internet for the first time, and I remember that's the first time I used the Internet.

这里使用过去完成时（I'd watched）不合适，因为句子中没有更早的过去事件作为参照，应该使用一般过去时'watched'。

× Well, every day I go online every day as a clinical medical student, I need to search the academic papers for my dissertations because in China, every dissertation needs to cause the scientific research of others.

✓ Well, I go online every day. As a clinical medical student, I need to search academic papers for my dissertation because in China, every dissertation needs to cite the scientific research of others.

原句结构混乱，重复使用'every day'且句子过长，应拆分为两个句子。同时，'dissertations'应为单数'dissertation'，'cause'应为'cite'，表示引用。

× Sure I can't. I remember that when I was in high school, the school forbid the students to bring the firms into the school area, so I am not I was not allowed to bring my phone with me that time.

✓ Sure I can't. I remember that when I was in high school, the school forbade the students to bring phones into the school area, so I was not allowed to bring my phone with me at that time.

'forbid'的过去式是'forbade'，'firms'应为'phones'，'I am not I was not'是重复错误，应删除多余部分。

× Of course it developed my.

✓ Of course, it developed me.

句子不完整，缺少宾语，'developed my'后面应有宾语，改为'developed me'使句子完整。

× With the life of pace, it becomes more and more rapidly than before.

✓ With the pace of life, it becomes faster and faster than before.

短语应为'the pace of life'，'rapidly'是副词，修饰动词，句中需要形容词'fast'来描述状态。

× Spend times online to search for for information is very It's an effective way to search accurate and updated information.

✓ Spending time online to search for information is very effective. It's an effective way to find accurate and updated information.

'Spend times'应为'Spending time'，'for for'重复，应删除一个，句子结构不完整，需拆分为两个完整句子。

× Well, birds are probably do some meditations which is one of my hobbies too.

✓ Well, I would probably do some meditation, which is one of my hobbies too.

'birds are probably do'语法错误，应为'I would probably do'，'meditations'应为不可数名词'meditation'。

× Secondly, I made playing basketball with my friends which can strengthen our relationship and friendship.

✓ Secondly, I play basketball with my friends, which can strengthen our relationship and friendship.

'made playing'用法错误，应使用一般现在时'play'，表示习惯动作。

× Well, that's all.

✓ Well, that's all.

该句无语法错误，无需修改。