Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且句子较长且结构混乱。建议简化句子结构，注意时态一致，避免重复表达。

例: I started using the internet when I was about 12 years old. My mother gave me a new mobile phone, and I used it to read books online and listen to music for the first time.

提案: 回答中表达不够清晰，语法和词汇使用不准确。建议使用更准确的表达，注意句子连贯性和逻辑性。

例: I go online every day because nowadays many things require internet access, like booking tickets, scheduling exams, or using public transportation.

提案: 句子结构混乱，语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子，注意主谓一致和时态，表达更自然。

例: Yes, when I was in junior and senior high school, my parents did not allow me to use the internet because they thought it would negatively affect my studies.

提案: 回答较为自然，但部分表达不够准确，句子稍显冗长。建议使用更准确的词汇，简化句子结构。

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. There are many things that attract me, like chatting, watching videos, listening to music, and cartoons, which I find very interesting.

提案: 表达不够连贯，语法错误较多，句子结构混乱。建议理清思路，使用连词使表达更流畅。

例: If I didn't have the internet, I think I would travel with my friends. Without the internet, I could really enjoy life, take photos, and go shopping more freely.

× I use it to reading books on the browser

✓ I use it to read books on the browser

动词不定式to后面应接动词原形，而不是动名词。这里应使用to read而不是to reading。

× I often use it to listening music

✓ I often use it to listen to music

动词不定式to后面应接动词原形。且listen后面需要介词to，正确表达为listen to music。

× I use it to reading books on the browser and I often use it to listening music, says first time.

✓ I used it to read books on the browser and I often used it to listen to music the first time.

描述过去的动作应使用过去时态。原句中使用了现在时，时态不一致。

× by bus, by subway is too many things need to online

✓ by bus, by subway, there are too many things that need to be online

缺少主语和谓语，且短语结构不完整。应补充there are，并且need后面应加to be。

× by bus, by subway is too many things need to online

✓ There are too many things that need to be done online, such as booking tickets, booking examinations, or taking the bus or subway.

原句结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，且表达不清晰。应重组句子，使其语法完整且表达明确。

× my parents don't want to me to play the mobile phone and online

✓ my parents don't want me to play on the mobile phone and go online

动词want后面直接接宾语，不需要to。且play后面应加介词on，表达玩手机。

× they thought it would be have a bad impact on my study

✓ they thought it would have a bad impact on my studies

would后面应接动词原形have，而不是be have。study作为不可数名词时意思不同，复数形式studies更合适。

× If I can, I want to spend 24 hours on the Internet

✓ If I could, I would want to spend 24 hours on the Internet

表达假设语气时，应使用虚拟语气could和would，表示不现实或愿望。

× I think I'll travel with my friend without Internet

✓ I think I'll travel with my friends without the Internet

friend应使用复数friends表示多个朋友；Internet前应加定冠词the。

× without Internet I can really enjoy the life I think

✓ without the Internet, I can really enjoy life, I think

Internet前应加定冠词the；life前不需要加the，表示一般意义。

× I can take photos or buy shopping

✓ I can take photos or go shopping

buy shopping是不正确的表达，应使用go shopping表示去购物。