Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有点冗长，且有语法错误（如“our household were”应为“our household was”）。建议回答时更简洁，避免重复“at that time”，并注意主谓一致。

例: I started using the internet when I was about six years old because my grandparents' house was one of the first in our country to have broadband.

提案: 回答较自然，但表达稍显复杂且有些冗余。建议简化句子结构，使用更地道的表达，如“It's hard to stay offline even for a day.”

例: I go online every day because the internet is an essential part of my life, and I like to keep up with daily updates.

提案: 回答中有语法和用词错误，如“concern about my heirs”应为“concern about my health”或“concern about my studies”。建议用更准确的词汇，并注意句子通顺。

例: Yes, my parents often limited my internet use during childhood because they were worried it would affect my health and schoolwork, and now I understand their reasons.

提案: 回答较好，但“allocating more time into those educational parts”表达不够地道。建议使用更自然的表达，如“spending more time on educational content”。

例: I think I spend a reasonable amount of time online. Recently, I've been trying to spend more time on educational content, like reading tech newsletters.

提案: 回答表达基本清晰，但句子连接不够流畅，且“by myself”用法不太自然。建议用更连贯的句子，并避免重复。

例: I haven't thought about it before, but if I didn't have the internet, I would probably spend more time reading books since I haven't done that for a while.

× I think our household were the first to have a broadband in the country at that time.

✓ I think our household was the first to have broadband in the country at that time.

'Household' is a singular noun, so the verb should be 'was' instead of 'were'. Also, 'broadband' is an uncountable noun and does not need an article 'a'.

× I think in today's world it's a little bit impossible for a person to get away from the net for even one day, unless in some special occasions.

✓ I think in today's world it's a little bit impossible for a person to get away from the net even for one day, except on some special occasions.

The phrase 'unless in some special occasions' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'on' for occasions, and 'except' fits better than 'unless' in this context.

× my parents restricted my use of Internet out of the concern about my heirs and school work.

✓ my parents restricted my use of the Internet out of concern for my health and school work.

'Heirs' is incorrect here; likely the intended word is 'health'. Also, 'the Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'out of the concern about' should be 'out of concern for'.

× They always sat straight to rules about my use.

✓ They always stuck strictly to rules about my use.

The phrase 'sat straight to rules' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'stuck strictly to rules'.

× I'm recently considering allocating more time into those educational parts, such as subscribing to tech newsletters.

✓ I'm recently considering allocating more time to those educational parts, such as subscribing to tech newsletters.

The verb 'allocate' is followed by the preposition 'to', not 'into'.

× Actually. I think if I do not have access to the Internet, I would read a book by myself.

✓ Actually, I think if I did not have access to the Internet, I would read a book by myself.

The sentence is split incorrectly with a period after 'Actually'. Also, the conditional sentence requires past tense 'did not have' to express hypothetical situation.

× I haven't read a book for a long time.

✓ I haven't read a book for a long time.

This sentence is correct as it is; no correction needed.