Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答基本清晰，但句子结构稍显简单，且有些语法错误（如“in the primary school”应为“in primary school”）。建议使用更自然的表达，并注意冠词的使用。

例: I started using the internet when I was in primary school because my school allowed us to bring laptops to class and use them for lessons.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然的地方，如“stay a happy mood”应为“stay in a happy mood”，以及“search the information for the studies”应更准确。建议使用更地道的表达，并注意连词的使用。

例: I go online every day because it helps me keep in touch with my friends, which makes me feel happy. Moreover, I often search for information related to my studies.

提案: 回答中时态混用（'don't allow'应为过去时），且表达重复。建议使用正确时态，避免重复，并丰富细节。

例: Yes, when I was a child, my parents didn't allow me to use the internet often because they believed it could have a negative impact on me and harm my eyesight.

提案: 回答较长且有重复（'because'使用两次），句子结构复杂但不够流畅。建议简化句子，使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because the internet has become an essential part of my life. It is very convenient for me to find articles and learning materials for my studies.

提案: 回答中有语法错误（'will reading'应为'will read'），表达不够连贯，且细节不够具体。建议注意动词形式，使用连接词，并丰富细节。

例: Without the internet, I would read books or watch movies at the cinema with my friends. We might also go shopping and chat about our week.

× I go online every day because I need to keep in touch with my friends which can help me stay a happy mood.

✓ I go online every day because I need to keep in touch with my friends, which can help me stay in a happy mood.

The phrase 'stay a happy mood' is incorrect because 'stay' should be followed by a preposition 'in' when referring to a state or condition. The correct phrase is 'stay in a happy mood'. Also, a comma is needed before 'which' as it introduces a non-restrictive clause.

× Yes, when I was a kid, my parents don't allow me to use Internet very often because they think Internet can bring a bad impact on me and they think Internet can damage my eyesight.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, my parents didn't allow me to use the Internet very often because they thought the Internet could have a bad impact on me and damage my eyesight.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Don't allow' should be 'didn't allow' to match past tense. Also, 'Internet' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Can bring a bad impact' is better expressed as 'could have a bad impact' to match past tense and modal usage. 'They think' should be 'they thought' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Without the Internet I will reading some books or watching some movies in the cinema with my friends.

✓ Without the Internet, I will read some books or watch some movies in the cinema with my friends.

After modal verb 'will', the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'will reading' should be 'will read' and 'watching' should be 'watch'. Also, a comma is needed after 'Without the Internet' for clarity.