Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Следует избегать повторов и неясных выражений, а также использовать связующие слова для логичности.

例: I started using the internet when I was in the fourth grade because that was when I got my first phone. Since then, I have been using it regularly for various purposes.

提案: Ответ должен быть более полным и завершённым, избегать незаконченных предложений и использовать связующие слова для плавности.

例: I go online almost all day because I am preparing for the IELTS exam. For example, I use the internet to check information and chat with my friends.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и неясные выражения. Следует использовать полные предложения и чётко выражать мысли.

例: Yes, I remember when I was a child, my mother was quite strict about screen time because it distracted me from my studies. Sometimes, she would even take my phone away.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным, избегать незавершённых мыслей и использовать связующие слова.

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. I want to reduce my internet use so that I can focus more on myself and my studies because the phone and internet take up most of my time.

提案: Ответ должен быть более чётким и грамматически правильным, с использованием связующих слов и конкретных деталей.

例: Without the internet, I would have more time to study and focus on myself. Additionally, I could do more sports and spend quality time with my family to strengthen our relationships.

× I don't remember when I started to use Internet

✓ I don't remember when I started using the Internet

The verb 'start' is commonly followed by the gerund form '-ing' when indicating the beginning of an action. Also, 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× I started to use Internet

✓ I started to use the Internet

The word 'Internet' is a unique noun and requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× when I was in search or 4th grade

✓ when I was in 4th grade

The phrase 'in search or 4th grade' is incorrect; it should be 'in 4th grade' to indicate the grade level.

× I started to use the Internet at this age from child, but from childhood

✓ I started using the Internet at this age, from childhood

Use the gerund form 'using' after 'started'. Also, 'from child' is incorrect; 'from childhood' is the correct expression.

× I consider that it's practically a whole day because now I'm preparing for aisles and I need to be online to check the information or to prepare

✓ I consider that I am online practically the whole day because now I'm preparing for IELTS and I need to be online to check information or to prepare

The phrase 'practically a whole day' needs a subject and verb to be a complete sentence. Also, 'aisles' is a misspelling of 'IELTS'. 'Check the information' should be 'check information' as 'information' is uncountable.

× So for example I use the Internet to chat with my friends or.

✓ For example, I use the Internet to chat with my friends.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'or' which is incomplete. Removing 'or' completes the sentence properly.

× my mom. Were quite strict about screen time

✓ my mom was quite strict about screen time

The subject 'my mom' is singular, so the verb should be 'was' not 'were'.

× and so that it distract my highlights

✓ and so that it distracts my studies

The verb should agree with the subject 'it' and be in third person singular 'distracts'. 'My highlights' is unclear; likely intended 'my studies' or 'my focus'.

× but now she also can can take my phone

✓ but now she can also take my phone

The modal verb 'can' should not be repeated. The adverb 'also' should be placed after 'can'.

× I think I spent too much time online

✓ I think I spend too much time online

The present tense 'spend' is appropriate here because the question is about current habits, not past actions.

× I desire to spend less time online and focus on myself or to study

✓ I want to spend less time online and focus on myself or study

The verb 'desire' is formal and uncommon in this context; 'want' is more natural. Also, parallel structure requires 'focus on myself or study' without 'to' before 'study'.

× phone and Internet takes all my time

✓ phone and Internet take all my time

The compound subject 'phone and Internet' is plural, so the verb should be 'take' not 'takes'.

× I just can't do anything without.

✓ I just can't do anything without them.

The sentence is incomplete; 'without' requires an object, here 'them' refers to phone and Internet.

× Without the Internet, I'll have more time to study for being focused on myself or to do sports and spend time with my family to be closer with him

✓ Without the Internet, I'll have more time to study, focus on myself, do sports, and spend time with my family to be closer to them

The phrase 'for being focused' is incorrect; use 'focus on myself'. Also, 'to be closer with him' should be 'to be closer to them' to agree with 'family' (plural).

× I wish I don't have an Internet to be more productive in the day

✓ I wish I didn't have the Internet so I could be more productive during the day

The verb after 'wish' for present unreal situations should be in past tense 'didn't have'. Also, 'an Internet' is incorrect; use 'the Internet'. 'In the day' should be 'during the day'.