Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言较为重复，如“when I was young, at a young age”，建议避免重复表达，语言更自然流畅。同时，句子结构可以更紧凑，避免冗长。

例: I started using the Internet when I was in primary school because my family bought a laptop at that time and my parents allowed me to use it.

提案: 回答中表达不够清晰，“useless Internet”用词不准确，建议用更具体的词汇描述。同时，句子衔接可以更自然，避免断裂。

例: I usually spend about six hours online, which I think is too much. Therefore, I plan to reduce my online time and focus more on studying for exams.

提案: 表达不够自然，语法错误较多，如“childhood sad day”和“she banned me”不明确。建议用更准确的表达和完整句子。

例: When I was a child, my parents once banned me from using the Internet because I spent too much time playing video games and they worried about my eyesight.

提案: 用词不当，如“the Internet is so fashion”不符合语境。句子结构不够连贯，建议使用更准确的词汇和更自然的表达。

例: Yes, I spend about six hours online every day. Although the Internet is popular and helps me stay in touch with friends, I know I should limit my time on it.

提案: 回答内容不够连贯，句子不完整，如“Maximum Dynasty”缺乏上下文。建议用完整句子表达兴趣和理由。

例: Without the Internet, I would read interesting books, especially about history. I love learning about great historical figures and their stories.

× My family bought a laptop at the same period and my parents allowed me to use Internet when I was young, at a young age.

✓ My family bought a laptop at the same time and my parents allowed me to use the Internet when I was young, at a young age.

这里“at the same period”用法不当，应该用“at the same time”表示“同时”。此外，“use Internet”缺少冠词，应该是“use the Internet”。这属于过去时态描述中的搭配和冠词使用问题。

× my parents allowed me to use Internet when I was young, at a young age.

✓ my parents allowed me to use the Internet when I was young, at a young age.

“Internet”前面需要加定冠词“the”，因为这里指的是特定的互联网。缺少冠词是英语中常见错误。

× I usually go online for six hours a day.

✓ I usually go online for about six hours a day.

“six hours a day”表达时间长度时，通常加上“about”表示大约，语气更自然。

× I think it is really too much time for me to surf the Internet and I should control the time spent online.

✓ I think it is really too much time for me to surf the Internet and I should control the time I spend online.

“control the time spent online”表达不够准确，应该用“control the time I spend online”更符合英语习惯。

× From now on I will try to focus on examinations and useless Internet.

✓ From now on I will try to focus on examinations and useless Internet use.

“useless Internet”表达不完整，应该是“useless Internet use”，表示“无用的上网行为”。

× It was in my childhood sad day.

✓ It was a sad day in my childhood.

“childhood sad day”词序错误，应该调整为“a sad day in my childhood”，符合英语表达习惯。

× my parents were careful about me and they didn't want me to destroy my eyesight so she banned me from using.

✓ my parents were careful about me and they didn't want me to damage my eyesight so they banned me from using it.

前文主语是“my parents”，后文用“she”指代不明，应改为“they”。此外，“destroy my eyesight”用词不当，应该用“damage my eyesight”。最后“banned me from using”缺少宾语，应补充“it”指代互联网。

× Yes, I really spend too much time online, such as I spend 6 hours a day.

✓ Yes, I really spend too much time online; for example, I spend 6 hours a day.

“such as”用法不当，应该用“for example”引出例子，更符合英语表达习惯。

× I think the Internet is so fashion and I should keep communication with my friends online, but I should control the time.

✓ I think the Internet is so fashionable and I should keep in communication with my friends online, but I should control the time.

“fashion”是名词，形容词应为“fashionable”。“keep communication”应为“keep in communication”表示保持联系。

× I will just read some interesting books. Maximum Dynasty.

✓ I will just read some interesting books, like the Ming Dynasty.

“Maximum Dynasty”应为“Ming Dynasty”（明朝），且句子应连贯，使用“like”引出例子。

× I really want to know that.

✓ I really want to know about that.

“know that”表达不完整，应该用“know about that”表示想了解相关内容。