Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中有语法错误，且表达不够自然。建议注意冠词的使用，如"the Internet"，并避免句子碎片。可以将信息整合成更流畅的句子。

例: I started using the Internet when I was in primary school because my parents bought a computer for our home. That was the first time I was introduced to it.

提案: 时态使用不一致，且表达略显重复。建议统一时态，避免重复表达，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I go online every day because I use my phone to keep in touch with my friends and family. Also, I always use the Internet when I do my assignments.

提案: 回答较完整，但"using Internet"缺少冠词"the"，且句子可以更简洁自然。建议注意冠词使用，并适当简化句子。

例: I remember that before my final exams in middle school, my mom forbade me from using the Internet because she thought it was a waste of time and I should focus on studying.

提案: 表达不够自然，"that is very amazing"用词不当，且句子结构不够连贯。建议使用更合适的词汇和连接词，使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, sometimes I notice that I spend about 12 hours a day on my phone, which is quite surprising. Therefore, I think I should spend more time outside to connect with nature.

提案: 缺少冠词"the"，且表达略显重复。建议注意冠词使用，并丰富细节，使回答更具体。

例: To be honest, I can't imagine life without the Internet because I rely on it for everything, such as staying in touch with my friends and family and searching for information.

× I started using Internet when I was in primary school.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in primary school.

Internet 前需要加定冠词 the，因为 Internet 是特指的网络。

× My parents bought a computer for our home that is.

✓ My parents bought a computer for our home, that is.

句中 that is 前应加逗号，表示插入语。

× That was the first time I was introduced to the Internet.

✓ That was the first time I was introduced to the Internet.

此句无错误，保留原句。

× I go online every day because I always use my phone to keep in touch with my friends and families.

✓ I go online every day because I always use my phone to keep in touch with my friends and family.

family 通常作为不可数名词或集合名词使用，不用复数形式 families。

× Also, when I was doing my assignments, I always use Internet.

✓ Also, when I was doing my assignments, I always use the Internet.

Internet 前需要加定冠词 the。

× Also, when I was doing my assignments, I always use Internet.

✓ Also, when I was doing my assignments, I always used the Internet.

句中描述过去的动作，动词 use 应用过去式 used。

× I remember when I was in middle school and just before the final exams, my mom forbade me from using Internet because she thought that was a waste of time and I should spend time preparing for it.

✓ I remember when I was in middle school and just before the final exams, my mom forbade me from using the Internet because she thought that was a waste of time and I should spend time preparing for it.

Internet 前需要加定冠词 the。

× Yes, sometimes when I see my screen time on my phone that is about 12 hours a day, that is very amazing.

✓ Yes, sometimes when I see my screen time on my phone, that is about 12 hours a day, that is very amazing.

句中需要在 phone 后加逗号，分隔句子成分。

× So sometimes I would think maybe I should go outside to get close to the nature.

✓ So sometimes I would think maybe I should go outside to get close to nature.

nature 前不加定冠词 the，因为此处指的是自然的概念。

× To be honest, I can't imagine without Internet.

✓ To be honest, I can't imagine life without the Internet.

句子缺少宾语，且 Internet 前需要加定冠词 the。

× I do everything depending on Internet, like connecting with my friends and families and searching for some information.

✓ I do everything depending on the Internet, like connecting with my friends and family and searching for some information.

Internet 前需要加定冠词 the；family 不用复数形式 families。