Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时态使用不准确，应使用过去时态描述过去的动作，且表达应更自然流畅。避免重复表达“电脑”和“互联网”，并简化句子结构。

例: I started using the Internet when I was a child because there was a computer in my room, which made it easy for me to access it.

提案: 回答中表达不够自然，‘Apps Online edition’不明确，应使用更地道的表达方式。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I go online every day because I need to keep in touch with my friends and family through messaging apps, and I also search for important information on the Internet.

提案: 回答中信息表达不清晰，语法错误较多。应明确说明禁止使用互联网的时间和原因，避免重复和语法错误。

例: Yes, during my senior high school years, we were not allowed to use mobile phones or the Internet to help us concentrate on our studies.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复词汇，表达不够流畅。建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I spend too much time online because, besides keeping in touch with friends and family, I am often attracted by entertainment apps like short video platforms.

提案: 回答不完整，缺少具体书名，且表达不够自然。建议补充具体细节，避免句子未完成的情况。

例: If there were no Internet, I would spend more time reading books because I enjoy stories. For example, I really love the novel 'To Kill a Mockingbird'.

× I use the Internet since I was a child because there was a computer in my room, so I could touch the Internet by the computer easily.

✓ I have used the Internet since I was a child because there was a computer in my room, so I could access the Internet easily through the computer.

句子中使用了“since I was a child”，表示从过去某时开始一直持续到现在，应该用现在完成时态，而不是一般现在时。建议将“I use”改为“I have used”。另外，“touch the Internet”表达不准确，应该用“access the Internet”表示“上网”。

× I go online every day because I have to keep in touch with my friends and parents by Apps Online edition.

✓ I go online every day because I have to keep in touch with my friends and parents through online apps.

“keep in touch with”后面接人，表示保持联系，使用介词“by”不合适，应该用“through”表示通过某种方式。此外，“Apps Online edition”表达不自然，改为“online apps”更准确。

× I search in the Internet for some necessary information.

✓ I search the Internet for some necessary information.

动词“search”后面直接接宾语，不需要介词“in”，因此应去掉“in”。

× Yes, I can talk about a time that was my Senior High School stage.

✓ Yes, I can talk about a time during my Senior High School stage.

“a time that was my Senior High School stage”表达不自然，应该用“during my Senior High School stage”表示“在高中阶段期间”。

× You know, in China there is a rule that Senior High School students can use mobile phones and the Internet to ensure they focus on their study.

✓ You know, in China there is a rule that Senior High School students cannot use mobile phones and the Internet to ensure they focus on their studies.

根据语境，应该是学生不能使用手机和网络以保证专注学习，原句中“can use”与语境不符，应改为“cannot use”。另外，“focus on their study”应改为“focus on their studies”，因为“studies”更常用来指学习活动。

× Yes, it costs me too much time to surf online because besides keep keep in touch with friends and parents, I will be attracted by other entertainment apps like short videos.

✓ Yes, it takes me too much time to surf online because besides keeping in touch with friends and parents, I am attracted by other entertainment apps like short videos.

“costs me too much time”表达不自然，应该用“takes me too much time”。“besides keep keep in touch”中“keep”重复且用法错误，应该用动名词“keeping”。“I will be attracted”时态不合适，描述习惯动作应使用一般现在时“am attracted”。

× If there were no Internet, I would choose to spend time on reading books because I love enjoying the stories in the books.

✓ If there were no Internet, I would choose to spend time reading books because I love enjoying the stories in them.

“spend time on reading books”中“on”多余，应该直接用“spend time reading books”。“the stories in the books”重复“the books”，改为“in them”更简洁自然。

× For example, I really love the book called.

✓ For example, I really love the book called [book name].

句子不完整，缺少书名，导致结构不完整。应补充书名使句子完整。