Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误，如“started surf”应为“started surfing”或“started to surf”，此外，表达不够自然，建议使用更地道的表达方式，并注意句子结构的完整性。

例: I started using the internet when I was about 12 years old. My father bought the first computer for our home, and I usually used it for studying and entertainment.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，如“check my I check out”，表达不够连贯，建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用恰当的连接词使回答更流畅。

例: I go online several times a day. For example, in the morning, I check my emails and messages to stay updated with my studies and current events. I also watch videos to relax and entertain myself.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，如“I I”，“my parents my parents”，表达不清晰，建议简化句子，注意时态和主谓一致，表达更准确。

例: Yes, I remember that about a year after my father bought the first computer, I used the internet almost every day. However, my eyesight worsened, so my parents restricted my internet use.

提案: 回答中有重复和表达不自然的地方，如“usually spend many times”，建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，避免重复，提高表达的自然度。

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. I use the internet for studying and entertainment, and I often check my emails and messages to stay updated. However, I also spend a lot of time chatting with my friends on WeChat.

提案: 回答较为完整且自然，但可以使用更多连接词使句子更流畅，同时避免重复“stay focused”。

例: Well, there's a beautiful park near my apartment, so on weekends I usually take a book and sit on a bench near the lake. This helps me avoid distractions from short videos and social media, allowing me to concentrate better on important things.

× I started surf the Internet through computer about my 12 years old.

✓ I started surfing the Internet through the computer when I was about 12 years old.

动词start后面应接动名词形式surfing，而不是原形动词surf。此外，表达年龄时应使用完整结构“when I was about 12 years old”。

× I started surf the Internet through computer about my 12 years old.

✓ I started surfing the Internet through the computer when I was about 12 years old.

介词through用来表示“通过”，这里用来表达“用电脑上网”不太合适，应该用介词“on”或“using”，但更自然的表达是“through the computer”。另外，缺少冠词the。

× I started surf the Internet through computer about my 12 years old.

✓ I started surfing the Internet through the computer when I was about 12 years old.

computer前缺少定冠词the，表示特指家里的电脑。

× My father purchased the first computer for our home.

✓ My father purchased the first computer for our home.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× I usually used the computer for study and entertainment.

✓ I usually used the computer for studying and entertainment.

动词used后面接动名词形式studying，表示用途。

× I usually used the computer for study and entertainment.

✓ I usually used the computer for studying and entertainment.

study作为动词时应使用动名词形式studying，表示“用于学习”。

× I surf the Internet for many times a day.

✓ I surf the Internet many times a day.

many times前不需要介词for，times是复数形式，表示次数。

× I surf the Internet for many times a day.

✓ I surf the Internet many times a day.

介词for在此处多余，应直接使用many times表示频率。

× For example, in the morning I check my I check out my emails and messages to stay up late, to stay updated with my study and society.

✓ For example, in the morning I check my emails and messages to stay updated with my studies and society.

句子中重复了“I check my”，且“stay up late”与上下文不符，应删除。study应使用复数形式studies，表示学业。

× to stay updated with my study and society.

✓ to stay updated with my studies and society.

study应为复数形式studies，表示学业；society前不需要介词with，updated with是固定搭配。

× Also, I scrolled through the videos for relax and entertainment.

✓ Also, I scroll through videos to relax and for entertainment.

动词scroll应与前文时态一致用一般现在时scroll；relax应使用不定式to relax表示目的。

× Yes, I can reach all time that about one year after my father purchased the first computer I I got used to surfing the Internet through computer almost every day, but my eyesight was getting worse day by day.

✓ Yes, I can recall that about one year after my father purchased the first computer, I got used to surfing the Internet through the computer almost every day, but my eyesight was getting worse day by day.

reach all time表达不正确，应为recall表示回忆；computer前缺少定冠词the。

× I got used to surfing the Internet through computer almost every day, but my eyesight was getting worse day by day.

✓ I got used to surfing the Internet through the computer almost every day, but my eyesight was getting worse day by day.

computer前缺少定冠词the，表示特指家里的电脑。

× So my parents my parents restrict my online.

✓ So my parents restrict my online time.

重复出现“my parents”，应删除重复部分；restrict后应接名词，my online不完整，应改为my online time。

× So my parents my parents restrict my online.

✓ So my parents restrict my online time.

my online不完整，缺少名词time，导致表达不清。

× I usually spend time online for studying and entertainment.

✓ I usually spend time online studying and entertaining myself.

for studying and entertainment结构不自然，改为动名词短语studying和动名词短语entertaining myself更符合习惯用法。

× But I found I usually spend many times on chatting with my friends through WeChat.

✓ But I found I usually spend a lot of time chatting with my friends through WeChat.

many times用于表示次数，不适合表示时间长度，应该用a lot of time。

× Well, there's a beautiful park near my apartment, so on weekends I usually take a book with me and sit on the bench near the lake.

✓ Well, there's a beautiful park near my apartment, so on weekends I usually take a book with me and sit on a bench near the lake.

bench前应使用不定冠词a，表示泛指某个长椅。

× I think this can help me stay focused without the distractions of short video and social media, and this can help me stay focused on something important easily.

✓ I think this can help me stay focused without the distractions of short videos and social media, and this can help me stay focused on something important more easily.

short video应为复数形式short videos；easily前加more表示比较级，更符合语境。