Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid saying '8:00 or nine years old' as it is confusing; just say 'eight or nine years old'. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy.

例: I started using the internet when I was about eight or nine years old. Initially, I used it mainly for playing games and watching videos, which made learning enjoyable. Since then, it has become an essential part of my daily routine.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'my study schedule is quite subject'. Try to use clearer expressions and linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas.

例: I usually go online during my free time, especially after finishing my studies. Although my study schedule is busy, my parents encourage me to prioritise schoolwork over internet use. Therefore, I mainly use the internet to research assignments or watch educational videos to relax.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by correcting minor errors like 'import' instead of 'important'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating similar points.

例: I can't remember a specific time when I was not allowed to use the internet. Generally, I have unrestricted access during my free time to browse social media or watch videos. However, my parents sometimes ask me to take breaks to help me focus better on my studies, which I understand is important.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but contains grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'studying their leisures' and 'Limit my use'. Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I have a well-organised daily routine with specific time slots for studying and leisure. Moreover, my parents encourage me to focus on my study plan and limit my mobile phone use to avoid distractions. Therefore, I mainly use the internet for educational purposes rather than entertainment.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting minor grammar errors like 'Reading also improve' to 'Reading also improves'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid minor redundancy.

例: Without the internet, I would prefer reading books because they help me relax and gain knowledge simultaneously. For instance, I enjoy novels and biographies, which are great alternatives to online entertainment. Additionally, reading improves my concentration and vocabulary, making it a beneficial way to spend my time.

× I started using Internet when I was quite young, probably around 8:00 or nine years old.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was quite young, probably around eight or nine years old.

The word 'Internet' is a singular noun that requires the definite article 'the' before it. Also, '8:00' is a time, but the intended meaning is age, so it should be 'eight' spelled out and 'or nine years old' to indicate age range.

× I often go online when I am free, specially after finishing my studies.

✓ I often go online when I am free, especially after finishing my studies.

The word 'specially' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'especially' to indicate emphasis or particularity.

× However, my study schedule is quite subject and my parents always encourage me to focus more on my schoolwork rather than spending too much time on the Internet.

✓ However, my study schedule is quite strict and my parents always encourage me to focus more on my schoolwork rather than spending too much time on the Internet.

The word 'subject' is incorrectly used here; likely the intended word is 'strict' to describe the study schedule. This is a vocabulary error but relates to adjective use.

× For example, I usually use the Internet to research for my assignments or to relax by watching educational videos.

✓ For example, I usually use the Internet to research my assignments or to relax by watching educational videos.

The preposition 'for' after 'research' is unnecessary in this context; 'research my assignments' is correct.

× No, I can't recall any specific time when I was not allowed to use the Internet. I generally have unrestricted access to it, especially during my free time when I like to browse social media or watch videos. However, sometimes my parents ask me to take a break from the Internet so that I can concentrate better on my studies, which I understand is import.

✓ No, I can't recall any specific time when I was not allowed to use the Internet. I generally have unrestricted access to it, especially during my free time when I like to browse social media or watch videos. However, sometimes my parents ask me to take a break from the Internet so that I can concentrate better on my studies, which I understand is important.

The word 'import' is a typo and should be 'important' to correctly convey the meaning.

× No, I don't think I spent too much time online because as a student, my daily routine is well organized with specific time slots for studying their leisures.

✓ No, I don't think I spend too much time online because as a student, my daily routine is well organized with specific time slots for studying and leisure.

The verb tense 'spent' is past tense but the context requires present tense 'spend' to match the ongoing habit. Also, 'their leisures' is incorrect; it should be 'and leisure' to indicate free time activities.

× Moreover, my parents always encouraged me to stay focused on my study plan.

✓ Moreover, my parents always encourage me to stay focused on my study plan.

The word 'always' indicates a habitual action, so the present tense 'encourage' is appropriate instead of past tense 'encouraged'.

× Limit my use of mobile phones to avoid distraction.

✓ They limit my use of mobile phones to avoid distraction.

The original sentence lacks a subject, making it incomplete. Adding 'They' clarifies who limits the use.

× Therefore, I mainly use the Internet for educational purpose rather than entertainment.

✓ Therefore, I mainly use the Internet for educational purposes rather than entertainment.

The noun 'purpose' should be plural 'purposes' to correctly express the general idea.

× Without the Internet, I would prefer reading books because it helps me relax and gain knowledge at the same time.

✓ Without the Internet, I would prefer reading books because they help me relax and gain knowledge at the same time.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'books' which is plural; the correct pronoun is 'they'.

× Reading also improve my concentration and vocabulary, so I think it would be beneficial way to spend my time.

✓ Reading also improves my concentration and vocabulary, so I think it would be a beneficial way to spend my time.

The verb 'improve' should be 'improves' to agree with singular subject 'Reading'. Also, the article 'a' is needed before 'beneficial way'.