Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且句子较长且重复。建议简化句子结构，注意时态一致，并避免重复表达。

例: I started using the internet when I was four because my mother said it would help with my studies. Since then, I have found it very useful in my daily life.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达不准确的问题，且信息重复。建议直接回答问题，避免重复，并使用连词使句子更流畅。

例: I usually go online about three times a week. Although I enjoy it, my mom encourages me to balance my time online and offline.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且句子结构不完整。建议使用正确的时态和表达方式，清晰说明原因。

例: Yes, when I was 10, I found online games very interesting, but my mom didn't allow me to play them because she thought they were harmful for children my age.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不够连贯。建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: No, I don't spend too much time online because my mom controls it. I think it's important to use the internet regularly but not excessively, as too much can affect study and work.

提案: 回答内容较好，但句子结构复杂且有语法错误。建议简化句子，注意词序和表达的自然性。

例: If I didn't have the internet, I would read more books to gain knowledge and understand the world better. Also, I would spend more time outdoors and enjoy hobbies that don't need digital devices.

× my mother says it's useful for my study

✓ my mother said it's useful for my study

这里的时间是过去时（当我四岁时），所以动词也应该用过去时。'says' 应改为 'said'。

× I begin to find that Internet is useful to my life and affect our life all the time

✓ I began to find that the Internet is useful to my life and affects our life all the time

句子描述的是过去发生的事情，动词 'begin' 应用过去式 'began'。另外，'Internet' 前应加定冠词 'the'，'affect' 应与主语 'Internet' 保持第三人称单数一致，改为 'affects'。

× I often go online about 3 * a week

✓ I often go online about 3 times a week

'3 * a week' 表达不正确，应改为 '3 times a week'，表示次数。

× Internet attracts me a lot

✓ The Internet attracts me a lot

'Internet' 前应加定冠词 'the'，表示特指互联网。

× so we take a balance and I go online about three times a week

✓ so we keep a balance and I go online about three times a week

'take a balance' 不是正确表达，应改为 'keep a balance'，表示保持平衡。

× my mom says said the Internet game was harmful to a 10 year old boy

✓ my mom said the Internet game was harmful to a 10-year-old boy

这里应使用过去时 'said'，去掉多余的 'says'。另外，'10 year old' 应加连字符，改为 '10-year-old'。

× the Internet game was so interest that attracts me a lot

✓ the Internet game was so interesting that it attracted me a lot

'interest' 是名词，形容词应为 'interesting'。'attracts' 应用过去式 'attracted'，与前文时态一致。

× if you go online too often and it may have a bad impact on your life and your study and work

✓ if you go online too often, it may have a bad impact on your life, your study, and your work

'if' 从句中不应使用 'and' 连接两个主语，应分开句子并用逗号分隔。

× which lets me more get to know the world

✓ which lets me get to know the world more

'more' 应放在动词短语后面，正确表达为 'get to know the world more'。

× and secondly I will spend more time outdoors or engaging in hobbies that don't require digital devices

✓ and secondly, I will spend more time outdoors or engage in hobbies that don't require digital devices

'or engaging' 应改为 'or engage'，保持动词形式一致。