Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and redundant phrases. For example, mention the year or your age when you started using the internet and describe briefly how you accessed it.

例: I started using the internet when I was 16, right after I passed my 10th standard exam. My father gave me a Nokia digital phone with mobile internet, which I accessed by recharging prepaid cards.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by avoiding filler words and making the response more natural and fluent. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide a concise explanation.

例: I am online almost all the time because I keep my Wi-Fi and mobile data turned on. This way, I can instantly check and respond to notifications whenever they arrive.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by removing filler words and making the structure clearer. Start with a direct answer, then provide specific details with linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the internet. It was during my last IELTS general exam, where the examiner asked us to switch off our mobile phones and store them in a locker outside the exam room.

提案: Try to avoid double negatives and filler words. Make your answer more concise and grammatically correct by using clear linking words to explain the change in your internet usage.

例: I don't spend too much time online nowadays. Previously, I used to spend a lot of time on the internet because I had nothing else to do. However, after getting a job and becoming busier, I now spend less time online.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding filler words and making the response more fluent and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples.

例: I can't imagine living without the internet because it has become essential. Without it, people would probably read more books to get information, watch more TV, and listen to the radio again.

× my Nokia's, uh, digital phone

✓ my Nokia, uh, digital phone

The use of the apostrophe 's' in 'Nokia's' incorrectly indicates possession or a contraction. Here, 'Nokia' is a brand name used as an adjective to describe the phone, so no apostrophe is needed.

× I used to spend a lot of time in online in Internet

✓ I used to spend a lot of time online on the Internet

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used before 'online' and 'Internet'. The correct prepositions are 'online' (no preposition needed) and 'on the Internet' because we say 'on the Internet' to indicate usage or activity.

× I don't have nothing to do

✓ I don't have anything to do

The phrase 'don't have nothing' is a double negative, which is grammatically incorrect in standard English. It should be 'don't have anything' to express the negative properly.

× maybe listen the radios again

✓ maybe listen to the radios again

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Therefore, 'listen the radios' should be corrected to 'listen to the radios'.