Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时句子较长且结构不够清晰，建议分句表达，避免冗长，同时注意用词准确，如"add the address to the top of the Internet"表达不够自然。

例: I started using the Internet when I attended an IT class in primary school. It was funny because we had to enter a web address, and I mistakenly typed my home address.

提案: 回答内容较好，但表达略显重复和不够简洁，建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意连接词的使用使句子更流畅。

例: I go online almost every day, especially at the end of each semester during college. That's when I need to search for background information and articles on Google Scholar.

提案: 语法错误较多，时态使用不当，句子结构复杂且不够连贯，建议简化句子并注意时态一致性。

例: I wasn't allowed to use the Internet during high school because I often searched for pirated movies and shows. My dad wanted me to focus more on my studies.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法问题，表达不够简洁自然，建议减少口头语，使用更准确的表达。

例: I don't spend much time online since starting college because I am busy. Also, I find it hard to find accurate information on websites, so I prefer using AI technology.

提案: 回答中口头语较多，表达不够流畅且缺乏具体细节，建议减少犹豫词，增加具体内容，使回答更自然完整。

例: Without the Internet, I would probably do some crafts and spend more time with my friends. Honestly, I can't imagine life without the Internet because I use my phone all the time.

× I started to use the Internet the first time I attended the IT class in primary school and it was very funny because at that time we were required to add the address to the top of the Internet and I printed my home address.

✓ I started using the Internet the first time I attended the IT class in primary school, and it was very funny because at that time we were required to add the address to the top of the Internet, and I printed my home address.

动词短语“started to use”在这里更自然的表达是“started using”，因为“start”后面接动名词表示开始做某事更常见。

× Almost every day, but I use the website more frequently, especially at the end of 1 semester during my college study because I have to search various background information and articles to read on Google Scholar.

✓ Almost every day, but I use websites more frequently, especially at the end of one semester during my college study because I have to search for various background information and articles to read on Google Scholar.

“website”应使用复数形式“websites”，因为通常指多个网站。数字“1”应写为“one”，并且“search”后应加介词“for”。

× I'm not allowed to use the Internet during my whole high school study because I often search for pirate videos like some movies or television shows on the Internet and my dad prevented me from overuse of Internet in order to encourage me focus on study.

✓ I wasn't allowed to use the Internet during my whole high school study because I often searched for pirate videos like some movies or television shows on the Internet, and my dad prevented me from overusing the Internet in order to encourage me to focus on my studies.

时态应与过去时间一致，使用“wasn't allowed”。“prevented me from overuse”应改为“prevented me from overusing”，动词后应接动名词。动词“encourage”后应加不定式“to focus”。

× I haven't spent a lot of time on the Internet since I entered the college because, uh, actually I did not have enough time to browse the Internet and I found that it's hard for searching accurate information on the website because I found AI technology is more useful.

✓ I haven't spent a lot of time on the Internet since I entered college because, uh, actually I haven't had enough time to browse the Internet, and I find that it's hard to search for accurate information on websites because I find AI technology more useful.

“did not have”应改为现在完成时“haven't had”以符合“since”引导的时间状语。动词“found”改为现在时“find”以表达当前观点。短语“hard for searching”应改为“hard to search for”。

× Umm, maybe do some hand work and hang out with my friends? Uh, to be honest, I haven't lived a life without the Internet since uh, I get used to using the phone so I can't figure it out.

✓ Umm, maybe do some handiwork and hang out with my friends? Uh, to be honest, I haven't lived a life without the Internet since, uh, I got used to using the phone, so I can't figure it out.

“hand work”应改为“handiwork”，表示手工活。时态“get used to”应改为过去时“got used to”，因为表示过去的习惯。