Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免冗余，注意语法错误，如“informations”应为“information”，并且句子结构可以更简洁自然。

例: I started using the internet when I was six years old after my father bought a new computer. Since then, I have used it daily for playing games and searching for information.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如“to connected”应为“to connect”，并且表达可以更自然流畅，避免重复。

例: I go online every day because it's essential in today's society. I use the internet to connect with my friends and to find new information.

提案: 句子结构不完整且语法错误较多，如“why was it”用法不当，应改为“yes, I remember”。建议使用更清晰的句子表达。

例: Yes, I remember last year in middle school, my parents didn't allow me to use my iPhone because they wanted me to focus on my studies and get good grades in the final exams.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“the first reaction I will take my iPhone”应为“my first reaction is to take my iPhone”。建议句子更连贯自然。

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. Whenever I face difficulties, my first reaction is to use my iPhone to look for solutions. Also, since my girlfriend lives in America, I talk to her online every day.

提案: 回答中有拼写错误，如“deer”应为“dear”或“deck”，并且句子可以更简洁自然。

例: If there was no internet one day, I would be happy. I would pick up a book, go to the beach, lie on the deck, and read all day because I enjoy a peaceful life.

× sometimes to play computer games, search some informations and so on.

✓ sometimes to play computer games, search some information and so on.

"informations" 是不可数名词，不能加复数形式。应使用单数形式 "information"。

× I must use online everyday to connected with my friends to search some new information.

✓ I must use the internet every day to connect with my friends and search for some new information.

"must use online" 表达不准确，应使用 "use the internet"。"connected" 应为动词原形 "connect"，因为前面有情态动词 "must"。另外，"everyday" 是形容词，表示“日常的”，应使用副词 "every day"。

× my parents don't allow me to use iPhones because they want me to focus on my studies and can get a best grad in the last examinations.

✓ my parents didn't allow me to use iPhones because they wanted me to focus on my studies and get the best grade in the last examinations.

时态应与上下文一致，使用过去时 "didn't allow" 和 "wanted"。"can get" 应改为 "get"，因为前面已经有 "wanted me to"。"a best grad" 中 "best" 是最高级，前面不加不定冠词 "a"，且 "grad" 拼写错误，应为 "grade"。

× the first reaction I will take my iPhone and to search for the solutions.

✓ the first reaction is that I will take my iPhone and search for the solutions.

"reaction" 后面需要连接词 "is that"，且 "to search" 应改为动词原形 "search"，与前面的 "will take" 保持一致。

× my girlfriend's living in America, so I have to talk to her every day online.

✓ my girlfriend is living in America, so I have to talk to her online every day.

"girlfriend's" 是缩写，应写完整 "girlfriend is"。"every day online" 的顺序不自然，改为 "online every day" 更符合习惯。

× If one day there is no Internet, I think I will be really happy about that.

✓ If one day there is no internet, I think I will be really happy about that.

"Internet" 在此处作为普通名词，首字母应小写。

× I will pick up a book and go to the beach, just lie on the deer and read the books for the whole days.

✓ I will pick up a book and go to the beach, just lie on the deer and read books for the whole day.

"lie on the deer" 应为 "lie on the sand" 或 "lie on the beach"，这里 "deer" 是动物名，不合适。"the books" 改为 "books"，因为泛指书籍。"for the whole days" 应为 "for the whole day"，表示整天。