Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为完整，但“migrant projects”用词不准确，建议使用更贴切的词汇如“school projects”。此外，句子稍显冗长，可以适当简化，使表达更自然流畅。

例: I started using the Internet when I was about 8 years old in primary school. At that time, I mainly used it to find information for school projects and homework. Since then, the Internet has become an essential tool for my studies and daily life.

提案: 回答内容清晰，但“loosen up”用词不够准确，建议使用“relax”或“unwind”。此外，句子结构可以更紧凑，避免重复表达“chance and opportunity”。

例: I usually go online about once a week because, as a boarding school student, we aren't allowed to bring phones or other devices. Therefore, I only have the opportunity to surf the Internet on weekends to catch up on social media and relax.

提案: 时态使用不够一致，如“haven't finished”应改为过去时“hadn't finished”。句子较多且部分表达重复，建议简化并注意时态一致性。

例: Yes, I remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet. One day after school, my mom found out I hadn't finished my homework, so she didn't let me use the Internet until I completed it. This taught me the importance of finishing my homework first.

提案: 句子结构有误，“that not allowed us”应为“that do not allow us”。“go home online”表达不清，建议改为“go online at home”。“loosen up”建议改为“relax”。

例: No, I don't think I spend too much time online because my school has strict rules that do not allow us to use the Internet during class hours. Therefore, I usually only go online at home during the weekends to relax, which helps me balance my studies and leisure time effectively.

提案: 回答内容丰富，但有重复“which can which can”，需注意避免重复。建议增加连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Well, there are many things I can do without the Internet. For example, I can read my favorite comics, novels, or science fiction, which can spark my imagination. Moreover, I can practice my handwriting to improve my focus.

× Because of that, she didn't allow me to use the Internet until I complete my tasks.

✓ Because of that, she didn't allow me to use the Internet until I completed my tasks.

这里的时间状语从句表示在过去某个时间点之前完成的动作，应该使用过去完成时态，故将complete改为completed。

× No, I don't think I spend too much time online because my school has strict rules that not allowed us to use the Internet during class hours.

✓ No, I don't think I spend too much time online because my school has strict rules that do not allow us to use the Internet during class hours.

这里的定语从句中缺少助动词do，导致语法错误。应使用do not allow来表达否定的现在时态。

× Therefore, I usually only go home online during the weekends to loosen up, which helps me balance my studies in leisure time effectively.

✓ Therefore, I usually only go online at home during the weekends to loosen up, which helps me balance my studies and leisure time effectively.

原句中go home online表达不清，应该是go online at home。并且balance后面应连接两个并列名词studies和leisure time，表达更准确。

× For example, I can read my favorite comics, novels, or science fiction, which can which can spark my imagination.

✓ For example, I can read my favorite comics, novels, or science fiction, which can spark my imagination.

句中重复了which can，属于连词重复错误，应删除多余部分。