Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần sử dụng thì đúng và cấu trúc câu tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như thì sai và cách diễn đạt không tự nhiên.

例: I started using the internet when I was 10 years old because it became popular around that time.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I suggest check emails' thành 'I usually check emails'. Ngoài ra, tránh lặp từ và dùng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

例: I go online several times a day. Usually, I check my emails, chat with friends, surf the internet, and update myself with the news. However, I mainly use it for studying.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn nên tập trung vào trải nghiệm cá nhân và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng. Tránh nói chung chung và lỗi ngữ pháp như thì sai và câu dài không mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I remember a time when I couldn't use the internet because my neighbors cut off the electricity, so the internet was not available.

提案: Bạn nên nối các ý lại với nhau bằng liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I use online' thành 'I use the internet'. Ngoài ra, tránh liệt kê rời rạc các hoạt động.

例: Yes, definitely. I spend about 7 hours online every day, which I think is too much. Most of the time, I use the internet for studying, chatting with friends, and updating myself with the news.

提案: Bạn nên dùng từ chính xác và câu ngắn gọn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ không phù hợp như 'discourage my house'. Hãy liệt kê các hoạt động một cách rõ ràng và có liên kết.

例: When the internet is temporarily disconnected, I usually read books, do my homework, help my parents clean the house, and have dinner with my family.

× I was born when the Internet is promoting, so I start using the Internet when I was 10 years old.

✓ I was born when the Internet was becoming popular, so I started using the Internet when I was 10 years old.

The phrase 'the Internet is promoting' is incorrect; it should be 'the Internet was becoming popular' to indicate the past progressive state. Also, 'I start' should be 'I started' to match the past tense context. The verb 'to be' is incorrectly used here, which is a 'There be issue'.

× I was born when the Internet is promoting, so I start using the Internet when I was 10 years old.

✓ I was born when the Internet was becoming popular, so I started using the Internet when I was 10 years old.

The verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started' to agree with the past time reference 'when I was 10 years old'. This is a past tense issue.

× I suggest check emails, chatting with my friends, surf the Internet and update news.

✓ I usually check emails, chat with my friends, surf the Internet, and update news.

The verb 'suggest' is incorrectly used here; it should be 'usually' to indicate frequency. Also, verbs following 'I' should be in base form or simple present tense, not '-ing' form unless after certain verbs. 'Chatting' should be 'chat'. This is a verb + -ing form issue.

× I suggest check emails, chatting with my friends, surf the Internet and update news.

✓ I usually check emails, chat with my friends, surf the Internet, and update news.

Using 'chatting' instead of 'chat' is incorrect here because after 'I' the base verb form is needed. This is a verb + -ing form error.

× For example, when my neighbors cut down the energy so I don't have Internet to use it.

✓ For example, when my neighbors cut off the electricity, I didn't have Internet to use.

The verb 'cut down' is incorrect; 'cut off' is the correct phrasal verb for stopping electricity. Also, 'don't have' should be 'didn't have' to match past tense. This is a past tense issue.

× For example, when my neighbors cut down the energy so I don't have Internet to use it.

✓ For example, when my neighbors cut off the electricity, I didn't have Internet to use.

The preposition 'down' is incorrect in 'cut down the energy'; the correct phrase is 'cut off the electricity'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions.

× I use online approximately 7 hours per day.

✓ I use the internet online for approximately 7 hours per day.

The phrase 'use online' is incomplete and awkward. It should be 'use the internet online' or simply 'go online'. Also, 'use' is present tense and acceptable here, but the sentence needs clarification. This is a present tense issue.

× I think it's too much and I usually use it for studying, chatting with my friends. Update News.

✓ I think it's too much, and I usually use it for studying, chatting with my friends, and updating news.

The sentence 'Update News.' is a fragment without a subject or verb. It should be connected to the previous sentence with proper conjunction and verb form. This is a sentence structure error.

× When the Internet temporarily disconnected, I usually read books, do my homework and help my parents to discourage my house and clean my house and also have dinner with my family, my parents.

✓ When the Internet is temporarily disconnected, I usually read books, do my homework, help my parents to decorate and clean my house, and also have dinner with my family.

'When the Internet temporarily disconnected' lacks auxiliary verb 'is' for present tense passive voice. Also, 'discourage my house' is incorrect; likely intended 'decorate my house'. The verb tense and word choice errors are present. This is a past tense issue and incorrect use of verbs.