Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and lacks linking words. Try to use past tense correctly and connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating 'Internet' unnecessarily.

例: I started using the internet during my childhood, specifically when I was in the 7th standard. At that time, we had a computer subject where my teacher taught us how to use the internet for educational purposes, such as completing assignments and researching information.

提案: Your answer is detailed but lacks clear sentence structure and linking words. Try to organize your answer into clear sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' to improve coherence.

例: I go online very often during my leisure time. For example, I spend one to two hours in the morning browsing the internet. Also, after lunch, I check WhatsApp and Instagram for about 10 to 15 minutes. Before sleeping, I spend around half an hour checking messages and updates.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to form complete sentences and explain your ideas clearly. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: Yes, I remember a time at home during my board examination preparation when my parents did not allow me to use the internet. They felt it would distract me from studying, so I stopped using it to focus better on my exams.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and grammatically incorrect. Try to use simple and clear sentences, and explain your opinion with reasons or examples.

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, especially during holidays and weekends. When I am relaxing at home, I often browse the internet, Instagram, and Facebook for long periods.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer sentence structure and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition.

例: If the internet were not available, I would participate in outdoor activities such as sports, art, and painting. Since the internet is mainly for indoor entertainment, I would spend more time outside preparing and enjoying these activities.

× I started using Internet in my childhood.

✓ I started using the Internet in my childhood.

The word 'Internet' is a unique noun and requires the definite article 'the' before it to specify it properly.

× My teacher teach me how to use Internet for the education purpose like getting assignments to complete, extracting information.

✓ My teacher taught me how to use the Internet for educational purposes like getting assignments to complete and extracting information.

The verb 'teach' should be in the past tense 'taught' to match the past time frame. Also, 'education purpose' should be plural and 'the Internet' requires the definite article.

× How often do you go online? Student: Very often in my leisure times, like in the morning for an hour to two hours, in the afternoon after the lunch around 10 to 15 minutes in order to check the updates in the WhatsApp and Instagram application before sleeping in half an hour to check who has tried to communicate.

✓ Very often in my leisure time, like in the morning for an hour or two, in the afternoon after lunch for around 10 to 15 minutes to check updates on WhatsApp and Instagram, and before sleeping for half an hour to check who has tried to communicate.

The phrase 'leisure times' should be 'leisure time' as it is uncountable. 'The lunch' should be 'lunch' without 'the'. Also, 'the WhatsApp and Instagram application' should be 'WhatsApp and Instagram' without 'the' and 'application' as these are proper nouns. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammar.

× Home in Austin Standard when I was preparing for the board examination.

✓ At home in Austin Standard when I was preparing for the board examination.

The sentence lacks a preposition to indicate location. 'At home' is the correct phrase to specify being at one's residence.

× My parents haven't allowed to use the Internet because they feel it may distract me from my studies.

✓ My parents didn't allow me to use the Internet because they felt it might distract me from my studies.

The phrase 'haven't allowed to use' is incorrect. The correct form is 'didn't allow me to use'. Also, 'may' is changed to 'might' to match the past tense context.

× So stop using the Internet may give me more.

✓ So stopping using the Internet might give me more time.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Stop using' should be 'stopping using' to act as a noun phrase. Also, 'may give me more' is vague; adding 'time' clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, sometimes when I will get holidays and leisure like in weekends so I was in relaxing mood and taking at my home.

✓ Yes, sometimes when I get holidays and leisure time, like on weekends, I am in a relaxing mood and stay at my home.

The future tense 'will get' is incorrect here; present tense 'get' fits better. 'Taking at my home' is incorrect; 'stay at my home' is appropriate. Also, 'in relaxing mood' should be 'in a relaxing mood'.

× So I will be continuously browsing on the Internet and Instagram and the Facebook addition to this one I feel like.

✓ So I continuously browse the Internet, Instagram, and Facebook. In addition to this, I feel like it.

The future continuous 'will be continuously browsing' is incorrect in this context; present simple 'continuously browse' is better. 'The Facebook' should be 'Facebook' without 'the'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× If in case Internet wouldn't be there, I may participate in outside activities like sport activities, art activities, painting and other things that Internet is for indoor time pass only.

✓ If the Internet weren't there, I might participate in outdoor activities like sports, art, painting, and other things, as the Internet is only for indoor pastime.

The phrase 'If in case' is redundant; 'If' suffices. 'Internet wouldn't be there' should be 'the Internet weren't there' for subjunctive mood. 'Sport activities' should be 'sports', and 'time pass' is corrected to 'pastime'. Sentence is restructured for clarity.

× If there is no intern, I may go out and prepare.

✓ If there is no Internet, I may go out and prepare.

'Intern' is a typo; it should be 'Internet'. The sentence is corrected accordingly.