Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần sử dụng ngữ pháp chính xác hơn và tránh lặp từ. Bạn nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy chú ý đến cách sử dụng thì và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I started using the internet about five years ago. I usually use it to communicate with my friends and to make new friends through various apps.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết hoặc lặp lại. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt hơn để thể hiện ý một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: I go online every day, mostly to use social media. I spend several hours online, but not literally 24 hours a day.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp, đặc biệt là thì và cấu trúc câu. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết.

例: Yes, I remember that I wasn't allowed to use the internet from 1:00 AM to 6:00 AM because that is when I usually sleep.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách sử dụng từ nối. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để thể hiện ý một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I want to maintain my relationships with friends. However, I plan to reduce my internet usage in the future.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp các chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Without the internet, I would spend more time doing activities like working out or going to the gym with my friends during my free time.

× I have a use Internet for five years.

✓ I have been using the Internet for five years.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'have a use' instead of the present perfect continuous tense 'have been using' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present.

× I usually use Internet for search for communicating with my friend and making new friends in exam in the apps.

✓ I usually use the Internet to search, communicate with my friends, and make new friends through apps.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'for search for communicating' is incorrect; 'to search' and 'communicate' are the correct verb forms here. 'My friend' should be plural 'my friends' to match the context.

× To be honest, I am always in online with in social media and and I think the time I uh, I am in a Internet is 24 hours.

✓ To be honest, I am always online on social media, and I think I am on the Internet 24 hours a day.

The phrase 'in online' is incorrect; it should be 'online'. Also, 'in social media' should be 'on social media'. The article 'a' before 'Internet' is unnecessary. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Uh, I think I can remember the time that I weren't allowed to use Internet is from, uh, 1:00 AM to 6:00 AM because it is the time that I go to sleep.

✓ Uh, I think I can remember the time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet, which was from 1:00 AM to 6:00 AM because that is the time I go to sleep.

The contraction 'weren't' is incorrect for the singular subject 'I'; it should be 'wasn't'. Also, 'use Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. The sentence structure is adjusted for clarity.

× Yes, I think I am spend too much time on Internet because I want to keep the relationship with my friends.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time on the Internet because I want to maintain relationships with my friends.

The phrase 'I am spend' is incorrect; it should be 'I spend'. 'On Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. 'Keep the relationship' is better expressed as 'maintain relationships'.

× However, in a however, I will try to reduce the time that I use Internet.

✓ However, I will try to reduce the time that I use the Internet.

The phrase 'in a however' is incorrect and redundant. Also, 'use Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× Well, I think the most time mine is not for Internet, so such some activity that I do like doing workout or going to the gym with my friends in my free time.

✓ Well, I think most of my time is not spent on the Internet, so I do activities like working out or going to the gym with my friends in my free time.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and awkward phrasing. 'The most time mine' should be 'most of my time'. 'Doing workout' should be 'working out'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× And so overall I think the time that so I think.

✓ Overall, I think that is the way I spend my time.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It is corrected to a complete and meaningful sentence.