Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够自然，句子较长且重复。建议简化句子结构，注意时态一致性，并避免冗余。

例: I started using the internet when I was in primary school because it was becoming popular then. My parents gave me a phone to help me with my studies and to find teachers online.

提案: 回答表达基本清晰，但存在语法错误和用词不当，如“scroll the videos to get myself”不自然。建议使用更准确的表达，并注意句子流畅。

例: I use the internet almost every day because it is very convenient. For example, I use WeChat to contact my friends, Taobao to shop, and TikTok to watch videos for entertainment.

提案: 回答中时态混乱，表达不够准确，且句子结构不完整。建议理清时态，使用更自然的表达，并注意句子完整性。

例: Yes, I remember when I was in primary school, my parents worried I would spend too much time online. So, they locked my phone and only allowed me to use the internet for 30 minutes a week.

提案: 回答内容较好，但存在语法错误，如“play online video games”应为“playing”。建议注意动词形式和句子连贯性。

例: Yes, I admit I spend too much time online, such as chatting with friends or playing online games. Sometimes I feel guilty about it, so now I try to limit my screen time by going out or reading books.

提案: 回答内容丰富，但有语法错误和表达不够自然，如“traditional method”应为“methods”，且句子较长。建议注意复数形式和句子简洁。

例: Without the internet, I would rely more on traditional methods like visiting museums or bookstores and hanging out with friends. It would be harder to contact friends, so I would have to meet them face to face.

× Well, when I started to use the Internet, it's when I'm in primary school because at that time the Internet it just gained popularity and my parents gave me a phone for me to use the Internet, search for the study or look for teacher to help me.

✓ Well, when I started to use the Internet, it was when I was in primary school because at that time the Internet had just gained popularity and my parents gave me a phone for me to use the Internet, search for study materials or look for a teacher to help me.

句中时态混用，描述过去事件时应使用过去时态，如"it was"和"I was"，而不是现在时"it's"和"I'm"。此外，"search for the study"应改为"search for study materials"，"look for teacher"应加冠词变为"look for a teacher"。

× Well, I almost use the Internet every day because I think Internet is very convenient and helpful.

✓ Well, I almost use the Internet every day because I think the Internet is very convenient and helpful.

"Internet"前应加定冠词"the"，因为特指互联网。

× I can use WeChat to contact my friend or I can use Taobao to buy something I want, or I will use the Tiktok scroll the videos to get myself.

✓ I can use WeChat to contact my friends or I can use Taobao to buy something I want, or I will use TikTok to scroll through videos to entertain myself.

"friend"应为复数"friends"，因为通常联系多个朋友；"the Tiktok"中"the"不应出现；"scroll the videos"应为"scroll through videos"；"get myself"表达不清，应改为"entertain myself"。

× Well, I can still remember that was the time when I'm in primary school.

✓ Well, I can still remember that was the time when I was in primary school.

描述过去时间时，"I'm"应改为过去时"I was"。

× Only 30 minutes a week can be the time I use Internet.

✓ Only 30 minutes a week was the time I could use the Internet.

表达过去允许的时间，应使用过去时态和情态动词"could"，而不是现在时"can"。

× My parents were worried I'll be digging Internet so they locked my phone and didn't allow me to use it.

✓ My parents were worried I'd be spending too much time on the Internet so they locked my phone and didn't allow me to use it.

"digging Internet"表达错误，应为"spending time on the Internet"。

× Sometimes when I spend too much time online I would feel sense of guilty.

✓ Sometimes when I spend too much time online I would feel a sense of guilt.

"feel sense of guilty"表达错误，应为"feel a sense of guilt"。

× So now I'm trying to push myself to not spend too much time online, just go out or read some books.

✓ So now I'm trying to push myself not to spend too much time online, just go out or read some books.

"to not spend"应改为"not to spend"，不定式否定形式位置错误。

× Well, without Internet I would probably rely more on traditional method of communication and information gathering, such as going to the museum or the book shop to buy some book or hang out with my friends.

✓ Well, without the Internet I would probably rely more on traditional methods of communication and information gathering, such as going to the museum or the bookshop to buy some books or hang out with my friends.

"Internet"前应加定冠词"the"；"method"应为复数"methods"；"book shop"合成词应为"bookshop"；"some book"应为复数"some books"。

× But it will be inconvenient for me to contact my friend without Internet, so I must go out and face to face talk.

✓ But it will be inconvenient for me to contact my friends without the Internet, so I must go out and talk face to face.

"contact my friend"应为复数"friends"；"without Internet"前应加定冠词"the"；"face to face talk"应改为"talk face to face"，副词短语位置错误。