Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более грамматически правильным и структурированным. Используйте прошедшее время для описания начала использования интернета и избегайте лишних слов. Также стоит добавить связующие слова для логичности.

例: I started using the internet about 10 years ago because we didn't have internet at home before. At that time, the internet connection was not very advanced, so I had to manage my usage carefully.

提案: Используйте правильные грамматические формы и более чётко выражайте мысли. Добавьте связующие слова для плавности и конкретизируйте частоту использования.

例: Nowadays, I have to be online almost all the time because of work. However, I realize it's not healthy, so I am trying to find a better balance.

提案: Ответ должен быть более чётким и грамматически правильным. Используйте сравнительные конструкции правильно и добавьте связующие слова для логичности.

例: Yes, when I was a student, the internet was more expensive than it is now, so I used it only for work and studying.

提案: Используйте правильные времена и избегайте повторов. Добавьте связующие слова и конкретизируйте, как вы пытаетесь сбалансировать время онлайн.

例: Yes, I spend a lot of time online, which I know is not good for my health. Therefore, I am trying to limit my internet and social media use to maintain a better balance.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова и уточните, что вы делаете без интернета.

例: If I didn't have the internet at home, I would try to read more books since I have many but didn't have time before. Also, I would spend more time outdoors, go to malls, and do gym and yoga exercises.

× Well, I start to use Internet at last 10 years because before we have not any Internet at home and Internet is not good in advance and there we must try to keep the balance.

✓ Well, I have been using the Internet for the last 10 years because before we did not have any Internet at home and the Internet was not advanced, so we had to try to keep the balance.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'start' in present tense instead of present perfect continuous to indicate an action that began in the past and continues. Also, 'have not any Internet' is incorrect; the correct negative form is 'did not have any Internet'. 'Internet is not good in advance' is unclear and should be 'Internet was not advanced'. The sentence needs proper tense consistency and clearer phrasing.

× Nowadays we are must to be online for every time because of work and I'm very often online but it's not good. I understand it and trying to balance.

✓ Nowadays, we must be online all the time because of work, and I'm online very often, but it's not good. I understand that and am trying to balance it.

The phrase 'we are must to be' is incorrect; 'must' is a modal verb and does not require 'are' or 'to'. Also, 'for every time' should be 'all the time'. The sentence also lacks the auxiliary verb 'am' before 'trying'. Modal verbs should be used correctly without auxiliary verbs, and expressions of frequency should be accurate.

× Yes, when I was a student the Internet was a an expensive entertainment than over than now and I used it only for work and study.

✓ Yes, when I was a student, the Internet was a more expensive form of entertainment than it is now, and I used it only for work and study.

The phrase 'was a an expensive entertainment than over than now' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. It should be 'was a more expensive form of entertainment than it is now' to correctly compare past and present. Also, 'a an' is a typo. Proper comparative structure and article usage are necessary.

× Yes, I'm very frequently using Internet and every time online but I understand realize that it's not good for my health so I trying. So I am trying to keep a balance between using Internet and social media.

✓ Yes, I use the Internet very frequently and am online all the time, but I realize that it's not good for my health, so I am trying to balance it. I am trying to keep a balance between using the Internet and social media.

The phrase 'I'm very frequently using Internet' is awkward; 'I use the Internet very frequently' is better. 'Every time online' should be 'am online all the time'. 'I understand realize' is redundant; 'I realize' suffices. 'So I trying' lacks the auxiliary verb 'am'. Consistent present tense and correct auxiliary verbs are needed.

× Well, when I have an Internet at home, I'm trying to read more books. I have more books but I have no time for it before because of Internet instructors. And I am trying to be outdoors, malls and do some gym and yoga exercises.

✓ Well, when I have Internet at home, I try to read more books. I have many books, but I had no time for them before because of the Internet. I am also trying to spend more time outdoors, go to malls, and do gym and yoga exercises.

'When I have an Internet' is incorrect; 'Internet' is uncountable and does not take 'an'. 'I'm trying' should be 'I try' for habitual action. 'I have more books' is vague; 'I have many books' is clearer. 'I have no time for it before' should be past tense 'I had no time for them before'. 'Internet instructors' is unclear; likely meant 'Internet'. The sentence needs correct article usage, verb tense consistency, and clearer phrasing.