Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且句子结构混乱。建议注意时态和句子完整性，避免重复和不连贯。

例: I started using the internet when I was 12 years old because my mom bought a computer at home. Since then, I have enjoyed playing computer games on it.

提案: 回答较为自然，但有些表达重复且不够简洁。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免口语化的“like”，并注意句子连贯性。

例: I go online every day because I need to chat with my friends using apps on my phone. It's very convenient, so I can talk to them anytime and anywhere.

提案: 回答内容基本完整，但语法和表达不够准确。建议注意句子结构，避免重复，使用更自然的表达方式。

例: Yes, during high school, my boarding school didn't allow us to use the internet, including cell phones and computers, because the rules were very strict. We were only allowed to focus on studying.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议注意时态一致性和句子完整性，表达更准确。

例: No, I don't think I spend too much time online. Although I often chat with my friends on my phone, I spend most of my day focusing on important things like studying and communicating in person.

提案: 回答表达有些重复且不够流畅。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，表达更自然。

例: If I didn't have the internet, I would spend more time reading books because I rarely have the chance to focus on one book and read it carefully.

× I started using the Internet at my 12 years old because then my home my mom bought a computer and I always play computer games on it.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was 12 years old because then at my home my mom bought a computer and I always played computer games on it.

“at my 12 years old” 应改为 “when I was 12 years old”，因为年龄表达时用“when I was + 年龄”；“my home my mom” 语序不正确，应为“at my home my mom”；“I always play”时态应与过去时间点一致，改为“played”。

× I started using the Internet at my 12 years old because then my home my mom bought a computer and I always play computer games on it.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was 12 years old because then at my home my mom bought a computer and I always played computer games on it.

描述过去发生的动作时，动词应使用过去时态，“play”应改为“played”。

× I go online like everyday and every minute because I have to chat with my friends on the applications in my cell phone.

✓ I go online like every day and every minute because I have to chat with my friends on the applications on my cell phone.

“everyday”是形容词，表示“日常的”，此处应使用副词短语“every day”表示“每天”；“in my cell phone”应改为“on my cell phone”，因为应用程序是在手机上使用。

× I go online like everyday and every minute because I have to chat with my friends on the applications in my cell phone.

✓ I go online like every day and every minute because I have to chat with my friends on the applications on my cell phone.

“in my cell phone”应改为“on my cell phone”，表示“在手机上”，介词用法错误。

× Yes, it's in my high school. The school didn't allow us to use the Internet includes cell phones or computer because it's a boarding school and it's very strict.

✓ Yes, it was in my high school. The school didn't allow us to use the Internet including cell phones or computers because it's a boarding school and it's very strict.

描述过去时间应使用过去时，“it's in my high school”应改为“it was in my high school”；“includes”应改为“including”，表示“包括”；“computer”应为复数“computers”，因为指多种设备。

× The school didn't allow us to use the Internet includes cell phones or computer because it's a boarding school and it's very strict.

✓ The school didn't allow us to use the Internet including cell phones or computers because it's a boarding school and it's very strict.

“computer”应为复数“computers”，因为指多种设备。

× We can only can do is study.

✓ All we can do is study.

“We can only can do”结构重复且错误，应改为“All we can do”，表示“我们唯一能做的就是”。

× No, I don't think so. As I mentioned before I always use my cell to chat with my friends, but most of my day was concentrate on some real things like study and communicate.

✓ No, I don't think so. As I mentioned before, I always use my cell to chat with my friends, but most of my day is concentrated on some real things like studying and communicating.

“most of my day was concentrate”时态和语态错误，应为“is concentrated”；“study and communicate”应改为动名词形式“studying and communicating”，表示正在进行的动作。

× As I mentioned before I always use my cell to chat with my friends, but most of my day was concentrate on some real things like study and communicate.

✓ As I mentioned before, I always use my cell to chat with my friends, but most of my day is concentrated on some real things like studying and communicating.

“concentrate on”后应接动名词形式，且时态应为现在时。

× I would like to read a book without the Internet because I now I have no time to concentrate on one book and read it patiently.

✓ I would like to read a book without the Internet because now I have no time to concentrate on one book and read it patiently.

“I now I have”中多余“I”，应删除；句子表达愿望，使用“would like”正确。