Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答缺乏连贯性和清晰的表达，建议回答时先直接回答问题，然后用简洁的句子补充细节，避免语法错误和无关内容。

例: I started using the internet when I was in primary school because my classmates encouraged me. I registered an account to keep in touch with my friends.

提案: 回答时应直接说明频率，并用连贯的句子解释原因，避免语法错误和重复。

例: I go online every day because I use my phone to complete assignments and communicate with my teachers.

提案: 回答缺乏逻辑和清晰度，建议先明确回答问题，然后用简单句子补充具体情况，避免无关内容。

例: Yes, I remember once in college when the internet was restricted during exams to prevent cheating.

提案: 回答应更清晰地表达观点，使用正确的语法和词汇，并举具体例子说明。

例: Yes, I spend a lot of time online, especially on social media. For example, I often watch videos and chat with my friends.

提案: 回答应直接回答问题，表达清楚没有网络时的替代方案，避免语法错误和不连贯。

例: Without the internet, I would rely on traditional sources of information like books and newspapers, and meet friends face to face.

× I started use user Internet in primary school because my classmate.

✓ I started using the Internet in primary school because of my classmate.

动词start后面应接动名词形式using，而不是动词原形use。

× I started use user Internet in primary school because my classmate.

✓ I started using the Internet in primary school because of my classmate.

介词because后面应接介词短语because of，表示原因。

× Search my classmate sister took you kill with charged with child so.

✓ My classmate's sister was charged with child abuse, so I registered an account.

原句结构混乱，缺少主谓宾，需调整为完整句子。

× I Why register an account? Account my friends My friends contact.

✓ I registered an account to contact my friends.

原句语序混乱，需调整为正确的陈述句。

× I surface there Internet every day because I use in the maybe phone completed the assessment and.

✓ I surf the Internet every day because I use my phone to complete assessments.

动词surf后直接接名词Internet，不用there；use后接名词phone，不用介词in。

× And and deal with the deal is a teachers explain the task.

✓ And I deal with the tasks as the teachers explain them.

原句缺少主语和谓语，语序混乱，需调整为完整句子。

× Yes, I remember is a College in trees is miniten because the the because the school is a proud province province China team so.

✓ Yes, I remember in college there was a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because the school is in a proud province in China.

原句语序混乱，缺少连贯性，需调整为完整且通顺的句子。

× Aids are. Is all what awards a lot through user in tonight?

✓ There are many rules about Internet use at night.

原句代词使用错误，且句子不完整，需改为正确表达。

× Yes, I think it's been a lot of time or on lamp is specially for inter teammate.

✓ Yes, I think I spend a lot of time online, especially for internet and teammates.

量词a lot of用法错误，且词汇拼写错误，需改正。

× Uh, and social media, for example, I often often watch videos are try team with friends.

✓ For example, on social media, I often watch videos or try to chat with friends.

副词often重复，动词try后应接不定式to chat。

× All with all the Internet aren't.

✓ Without the Internet, I wouldn't be able to do much.

代词使用错误，句子不完整，需改为正确表达。

× I'm maybe it was the station now.

✓ Maybe I would use traditional methods now.

句子结构混乱，需调整为完整句子。

× Traditional information wise such as the readings, book, newspaper, office, two faces.

✓ Traditional information sources such as reading books, newspapers, and face-to-face communication.

介词和名词搭配错误，需改为正确表达。

× A visit to office to face chat with tried.

✓ I would visit offices and chat face to face with friends.

句子结构不完整，需调整为完整句子。