Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In English (Cambodia), you should focus on clear sentence structure and avoid incomplete sentences. Try to give a direct answer first, then add specific reasons with linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Also, be careful with verb tenses and pronunciation.

例: I started using the Internet when I was in grade school because it helped me find information quickly and do research for my studies. Also, it allows me to communicate with my friends even when we are far apart.

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to use consistent verb tenses and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like 'for example' properly to connect ideas. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid repeating the same words.

例: I go online about five times a day because it helps me a lot and has changed my lifestyle. For example, I use apps like Telegram to check school information and communicate with my friends, which makes it easy to stay in touch with my family and friends.

提案: In English (Cambodia), focus on clear sentence structure and avoid incomplete or confusing sentences. Use correct verb forms and avoid unnecessary words. Try to explain your ideas clearly with linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

例: I wasn't allowed to use the Internet when I was a child because my parents said it could interrupt my studying and drain the phone's battery. They only allowed me to use it to check school information or complete online tasks.

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid unclear phrases like 'scrolling the widow'. Use linking words like 'however' properly to contrast ideas. Also, check your verb forms and prepositions.

例: Yes, I spend quite a lot of time on the Internet, especially for entertainment and social media. For example, I often use Facebook to chat with friends and watch funny videos. However, I also use the Internet for studying and staying organized.

提案: In English (Cambodia), focus on clear and complete sentences. Avoid mixing ideas without proper linking words. Use correct vocabulary and grammar to express your ideas clearly. Try to organize your answer logically.

例: Without the Internet, I would spend time refreshing my mood by reading books and newspapers, playing games, or talking to my friends face to face. This way, I can stay in touch with my friends and family and build respect among us.

× I start using the Internet when I was in great.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in grade.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started'. Also, 'great' seems to be a typo or incorrect word; it should be 'grade' to indicate school grade level.

× Well, I found out that spending time on the Internet is very useful for me because. I can. I'll get the information quickly an do the research for studying.

✓ Well, I found out that spending time on the Internet is very useful for me because I can get information quickly and do research for studying.

The original sentence is fragmented and has unnecessary periods breaking the sentence. It should be combined into a complete sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Additionally, it allows me to communicate with my friends even though we are.

✓ Additionally, it allows me to communicate with my friends even though we are apart.

The sentence is incomplete; the preposition 'apart' is needed to complete the thought about being separated but still able to communicate.

× I often go on line five times a day because it helped me a lot and it changed my lifestyle, for example.

✓ I often go online five times a day because it helps me a lot and it has changed my lifestyle, for example.

The phrase 'go on line' should be 'go online' as one word. Also, the tense should be present to match the frequency 'often' and the effect on lifestyle should be present perfect to indicate change over time.

× I always use apps like Telegram to check school information and communicate with my friends, which I find out it is very easy for me to stay in touch with my friends and family.

✓ I always use apps like Telegram to check school information and communicate with my friends, which I find is very easy for me to stay in touch with my friends and family.

The phrase 'find out it is' is incorrect here; 'find is' is the correct expression to indicate opinion or realization.

× I wasn't allowed to use the Internet when I was a child because my parents they saying that.

✓ I wasn't allowed to use the Internet when I was a child because my parents said that.

The verb 'saying' is incorrect in this past context; it should be the past tense 'said'. Also, 'they' is unnecessary and should be removed.

× The children should then this phone because it will interrupt their studying and get the battery cell.

✓ Children should not use this phone because it will interrupt their studying and drain the battery.

The original sentence is unclear and contains errors. 'Then this phone' is incorrect; it should be 'not use this phone'. 'Get the battery cell' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'drain the battery'.

× So in case they allowed their child to use their phone is that to check the school information or complete the task on line or?

✓ So, in case they allow their child to use their phone, it is to check school information or complete tasks online.

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly structured. It should be a complete sentence with correct verb tense and word order. 'On line' should be 'online'.

× Yes, I think I spend quite a lot of time on the Internet, especially for entertainment and social media.

✓ Yes, I think I spend quite a lot of time on the Internet, especially on entertainment and social media.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; 'on' is the correct preposition to indicate activities or platforms.

× For example, I always use Facebook app for scrolling the widow or chatting with friends which I find out I can watch the joke story.

✓ For example, I always use the Facebook app for scrolling the feed or chatting with friends, which I find allows me to watch joke stories.

'Widow' is a typo; it should be 'feed'. Also, 'find out I can watch the joke story' is awkward; 'find allows me to watch joke stories' is clearer. 'Facebook app' needs the definite article 'the'.

× However, I also use the Internet for studying an stay organized with that.

✓ However, I also use the Internet for studying and staying organized with it.

'An stay' is incorrect; it should be 'and staying' to maintain parallel structure. 'With that' is vague; 'with it' refers back to the Internet more clearly.

× Without the Internet, I would probably spend time to refresh my mode like reading, book, newspaper.

✓ Without the Internet, I would probably spend time refreshing my mood by reading books and newspapers.

'Refresh my mode' is incorrect; it should be 'refreshing my mood'. Also, 'book, newspaper' should be plural and connected properly.

× Play game are talking to my friend face to face it will.

✓ Playing games or talking to my friends face to face would help.

The original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. It needs to be restructured with correct verb forms and conjunctions.

× Stay in touch with my friend and family and we can be friend Leanne respect to other.

✓ Stay in touch with my friends and family, and we can be friends and respect each other.

'Friend Leanne respect to other' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'friends and respect each other' to convey mutual respect. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends'.