Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и структурированным. Начните с прямого ответа на вопрос, затем добавьте детали. Избегайте повторов и грамматических ошибок.

例: I started using the internet about six years ago. Since then, it has become an essential part of my daily life, helping me with both work and entertainment.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткую структуру. Используйте связующие слова для логичности и уточните частоту использования.

例: I go online several times a day because my work and personal life depend on it. For example, I check emails, chat with friends, and study online.

提案: Ответ не совсем по теме и содержит ошибки. Сосредоточьтесь на запрете использования интернета, избегайте лишних деталей и исправьте ошибки.

例: Yes, when I was a student, I was not allowed to use the internet during lessons or exams to prevent cheating.

提案: Ответ неясен из-за ошибок и повторов. Используйте простые предложения и объясните причину более чётко.

例: Yes, I spend a lot of time online because both my work and personal life rely heavily on the internet.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова и уточните, как изменится ваша жизнь без интернета.

例: If I didn't have the internet, I would probably spend more time with my family and focus more on my hobbies.

× Nowadays the Internet is playing crucial role in humans life.

✓ Nowadays the Internet is playing a crucial role in human life.

The noun 'role' is countable and requires an article 'a' before it. 'Humans life' is incorrect; the correct form is 'human life' as 'human' is used as an adjective here.

× So I I remember when I first started using Internet, it was six years ago.

✓ So I remember when I first started using the Internet; it was six years ago.

The word 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' before it. Also, the repeated 'I' is a typographical error and should be corrected.

× Nowadays I am using Internet more than before as it's connected was with my work and personal life.

✓ Nowadays I am using the Internet more than before as it is connected with my work and personal life.

The phrase 'connected was with' is incorrect; the correct form is 'connected with'. Also, 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× Weather for I mainly use it for checking emails, chatting with my friends and also for educational reasons.

✓ Whether for work or personal reasons, I mainly use it for checking emails, chatting with my friends, and also for educational reasons.

The word 'Weather' is a misspelling of 'Whether'. The phrase 'Whether for' is used to introduce alternatives. Also, the sentence was incomplete and unclear; adding 'work or personal reasons' clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, I had this kind of situations when I was a student and I was not allowed to use fan during the lessons and also I wasn't allowed to use Internet especially in the exams.

✓ Yes, I had these kinds of situations when I was a student, and I was not allowed to use a fan during the lessons, and also I wasn't allowed to use the Internet, especially in the exams.

The phrase 'this kind of situations' is incorrect; it should be 'these kinds of situations' to match plural 'situations'. 'Fan' requires the article 'a'. 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× Nowadays, yes, I think I'm spending more time online than before because nowadays balls, my personal life and job are related to the Internet.

✓ Nowadays, yes, I think I'm spending more time online than before because nowadays, both my personal life and job are related to the Internet.

The word 'balls' is incorrect and likely a typo for 'both'. 'Both' is used to refer to two items, which fits 'my personal life and job'.

× Nowadays I often distracted with the Internet, so if I didn't have it, I think I would spend more time with my family and I could manage. My hobbies as well.

✓ Nowadays, I am often distracted by the Internet, so if I didn't have it, I think I would spend more time with my family and could manage my hobbies as well.

The phrase 'I often distracted with' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I am often distracted by'. The sentence 'I could manage. My hobbies as well.' is fragmented and should be combined for clarity.