Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多，且内容表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，明确表达开始使用互联网的时间，并简要说明原因或感受。

例: I started using the internet when I was in the third grade of primary school. I used my older sister's laptop mainly to play games like Crossy Road and other simple games.

提案: 回答内容混乱，表达不清晰，缺乏连贯性。建议直接回答问题，并用简洁的句子说明上网频率及原因。

例: I go online almost all the time because I use speaking apps that require internet access. So, I am connected to the internet nearly every moment.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议明确说明具体时间和原因，并用连贯的句子表达。

例: Yes, I remember when I was in primary school, my parents did not allow me to use the internet on weekdays because I had a busy schedule with school and homework.

提案: 回答中断且表达不清晰，语法错误较多。建议用完整句子表达观点，并说明原因。

例: To be honest, I think I spend too much time on my smartphone, especially scrolling through TikTok videos, which sometimes makes me feel bored.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但句子结构简单，表达可以更自然流畅。建议丰富句子结构，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: If I didn't have the internet, I would spend my time exercising because I believe keeping fit is very important for a healthy life.

× Oh, actually when I was a children, maybe three grade in primary school, I used the Internet as.

✓ Oh, actually when I was a child, maybe third grade in primary school, I used the Internet.

children 是复数形式，表示多个孩子，而这里指的是单数的“我”小时候，应该用单数形式 child。

× From my older sisters laptop.

✓ From my older sister's laptop.

older sisters 缺少所有格的撇号，应为 older sister's，表示“我姐姐的笔记本电脑”。

× I love playing games like. Cross on CrossFit. And like course of.

✓ I love playing games like CrossFit and Course of.

句子中断断续续，且游戏名称应连贯表达，去掉多余的停顿，使句子通顺。

× Nike currently I'm talking to you to use the.

✓ Right now, I'm talking to you using the internet.

原句中 'Nike' 应为 'Right now'，且表达不完整，需补充完整句子。

× I'll speaking apps in need.

✓ I use speaking apps when needed.

'I'll speaking apps in need' 语法错误，正确表达应为 'I use speaking apps when needed'，表示“我在需要时使用口语应用”。

× In it you need access to the Internet so.

✓ In it, you need access to the Internet, so...

句子不完整，需加标点并补充完整，表达清晰。

× when I was a child in primary school, my parents won't let me use Internet at weekdays especially you will have uh, you would have a hectic work schedule, work study schedule and some.

✓ When I was a child in primary school, my parents wouldn't let me use the Internet on weekdays, especially when they had a hectic work and study schedule.

'won't' 应为过去时 'wouldn't'，'Internet' 前需加定冠词 'the'，'at weekdays' 应为 'on weekdays'，句子结构需调整使其通顺。

× my parents won't let me use Internet at weekdays especially you will have uh, you would have a hectic work schedule, work study schedule and some.

✓ My parents wouldn't let me use the Internet on weekdays, especially when they had a hectic work and study schedule.

描述过去的情况，动词应使用过去时态，且介词使用错误，应为 'on weekdays'。

× I think that's your, I spent so much time on the smartphone as just scroll up, scroll up TikTok and watch the video.

✓ I think that I spend so much time on the smartphone just scrolling through TikTok and watching videos.

'that's your' 语义不清，且时态应为现在时，动词形式需改为动名词形式以符合习惯表达。

× I think that's uh. Did Pete? Bora Board.

✓ I think that's boring.

原句不完整且含糊，推测意图为表达“我觉得那很无聊”，应使用形容词 boring。

× Oh, I will spend offline time just doing some exercise.

✓ Oh, I would spend offline time just doing some exercise.

回答假设性问题时，使用虚拟语气 would 更合适，表示假设情况。

× I think keep up physical body shape is important for our life.

✓ I think keeping up physical fitness is important for our life.

'keep up physical body shape' 表达不自然，改为 'keeping up physical fitness' 更符合英语习惯。