Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Please try to give a clear and direct response with correct sentence structure. Also, avoid ambiguous phrases like '50 class' and 'Mr. D'.

例: I started using the internet when I was in my 5th grade, which was during the COVID-19 pandemic. I mainly used it for online classes and staying in touch with my teachers.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has many unclear words. Please speak clearly and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, try to be concise and avoid repetition.

例: I usually go online every day because I believe it is important to stay connected with friends and family through the internet.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct grammar and provide specific reasons with linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, when I was a child, my parents did not allow me to use the internet because they believed it could harm my health and affect my social development negatively.

提案: Your answer is good but a bit long and has some grammatical errors. Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas and keep sentences clear and concise.

例: No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I set time limits on each app to protect my physical and mental health.

提案: Your answer is relevant and detailed but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use linking words like 'for example' and avoid repeating 'definitely'.

例: If I didn't have the internet, I would spend more time with my friends and family. For example, I would play outdoor games with my siblings and neighbours, and also read books during my free time.

× I started using Internet when I was in my 50 class or that time was during the COVID only and I used Internet for Mr. D mostly.

✓ I started using the internet when I was in my 50th class or that time was during COVID only and I used the internet for Mr. D mostly.

The word 'Internet' should be preceded by the definite article 'the' because it is a specific noun. Also, '50 class' should be '50th class' to indicate ordinal number correctly. 'COVID' does not need 'the' before it in this context.

× I usually go online on the on daily basis of nearly a Rab inner ER because I believe that one should be connected with.

✓ I usually go online on a daily basis nearly every day because I believe that one should be connected.

The phrase 'on the on daily basis of nearly a Rab inner ER' is incorrect and unclear. The correct phrase is 'on a daily basis nearly every day'. Prepositions and words should be used properly to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× His or her friends oh are they should be connected with their family by through online only.

✓ His or her friends or they should be connected with their family through online only.

The phrase 'oh are they' is incorrect and should be 'or they'. Also, 'by through' is redundant; only 'through' is needed. Pronouns and conjunctions should be used correctly to maintain sentence clarity.

× Yes, when I was a kid my parents prohibited me to use Internet because they believed that are on such a young age.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid my parents prohibited me from using the internet because they believed that at such a young age,

The verb 'prohibit' is followed by 'from' + gerund, not 'to' + infinitive. Also, 'Internet' should have 'the' before it. The phrase 'are on such a young age' is incorrect; it should be 'at such a young age'.

× Children should not be allowed to use Internet because it may impact their health badly and as it is not good for their social upbringing 2.

✓ Children should not be allowed to use the internet because it may impact their health badly and it is not good for their social upbringing.

'Internet' needs the definite article 'the'. The number '2' at the end is unnecessary and should be removed. The conjunction 'and as' is better replaced with 'and it' for clarity.

× No, I don't think I spend too much time online as a I have set of the time limits on every app I am and I make sure that I use every app of up to certain limit only so that it will not affect my physical as well as mental health badly.

✓ No, I don't think I spend too much time online as I have set time limits on every app and I make sure that I use every app up to a certain limit only so that it will not affect my physical as well as mental health badly.

The phrase 'as a I have set of the time limits' is incorrect. It should be 'as I have set time limits'. The pronoun 'I am' is unnecessary here. Also, 'of up to certain limit' should be 'up to a certain limit'.

× Well, if I would not be given an Internet then I would definitely spend some time with my friends in a an engaged myself in outdoor activities, more alike playing with my siblings, neighbors and I would definitely prefer to read books in free time.

✓ Well, if I were not given the internet, then I would definitely spend some time with my friends and engage myself in outdoor activities, like playing with my siblings and neighbors, and I would definitely prefer to read books in my free time.

In conditional sentences expressing hypothetical situations, 'if I would not be' should be 'if I were not'. 'An Internet' is incorrect; 'the internet' is correct. 'In a an engaged myself' is incorrect; it should be 'and engage myself'. 'More alike' should be 'like'. Also, 'in free time' should be 'in my free time'.