Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct verb tenses and form complete sentences. Also, avoid short, incomplete sentences and clarify your ideas more naturally. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I started using the Internet during my teenage years when it first became popular. At that time, technology introduced new ways to connect people through social media and online communication, which I found very innovative.

提案: Focus on using correct verb tenses and avoid informal expressions like 'Aye'. Also, try to make your answer more coherent by linking your ideas and using complete sentences.

例: I go online all the time because I turn on my mobile data whenever I go outside to stroll or relax. I usually keep it on since most of my communication happens through the Internet.

提案: Pay attention to pronunciation and spelling, and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and explain your opinion clearly and logically.

例: Yes, during working hours, using the Internet for entertainment is prohibited. It is only allowed for work-related tasks like sending emails and communicating with colleagues. I think this rule is good because it helps employees stay focused.

提案: Work on grammar accuracy, especially verb forms and sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' correctly to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because constant notifications distract me and make it hard to concentrate on my work. However, I am trying to limit my screen time by setting specific periods when I avoid using my phone to improve my focus and productivity.

提案: Your answer is quite good but try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your response more engaging and natural.

例: If I didn't have the Internet, I would probably spend more time reading books. Whenever I feel overwhelmed by too much screen time, I like to put my phone aside and immerse myself in a good book because it helps me relax both my eyes and mind. Moreover, reading enables me to learn new things and escape from daily stress.

× I start using Internet during my teenage years when it first blew up.

✓ I started using the Internet during my teenage years when it first blew up.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb should be in the past tense 'started' instead of the present tense 'start'. Also, 'Internet' should have the definite article 'the' before it.

× I start using Internet during my teenage years when it first blew up.

✓ I started using the Internet during my teenage years when it first blew up.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' before it because it is a unique entity.

× I mean the technology. Introduced us to connecting people through social media and Internet connection.

✓ I mean, the technology introduced us to connecting people through social media and Internet connection.

The original sentence is fragmented. Combining the two parts into one sentence with a comma after 'I mean' corrects the structure.

× I mean the technology. Introduced us to connecting people through social media and Internet connection.

✓ I mean, the technology introduced us to connecting people through social media and the Internet connection.

'Internet connection' should have the definite article 'the' before it to specify the connection.

× I think it's an innovative way, way back then.

✓ I think it was an innovative way back then.

The phrase 'way, way back then' is redundant and awkward. Removing the comma and one 'way' improves clarity. Also, 'it's' should be 'it was' to match past context.

× All the time I turned on my mobile data whenever I go outside to stroll or to just relax and wind.

✓ All the time, I turn on my mobile data whenever I go outside to stroll or just relax and unwind.

The verb 'turned' is past tense but the sentence describes a habitual action, so present tense 'turn' is appropriate. Also, 'wind' should be 'unwind' as the correct verb.

× All the time I turned on my mobile data whenever I go outside to stroll or to just relax and wind.

✓ All the time, I turn on my mobile data whenever I go outside to stroll or just relax and unwind.

The phrase 'to just relax and wind' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'relax and unwind'.

× Aye. Don't turn it off since I know for sure that most of my communication is through Internet.

✓ I don't turn it off since I know for sure that most of my communication is through the Internet.

The interjection 'Aye' is unclear and unnecessary. Also, 'through Internet' requires the definite article 'the' before 'Internet'.

× Aye. Don't turn it off since I know for sure that most of my communication is through Internet.

✓ I don't turn it off since I know for sure that most of my communication is through the Internet.

'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× Using Internet for. Entertainment purposes is prohibited schuring working hours.

✓ Using the Internet for entertainment purposes is prohibited during working hours.

The sentence is fragmented and contains spelling errors. 'schuring' should be 'during', and the period after 'for' is incorrect. Also, 'Internet' needs 'the' before it.

× Using Internet for. Entertainment purposes is prohibited schuring working hours.

✓ Using the Internet for entertainment purposes is prohibited during working hours.

'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× It's only allowed for working purposes like sending emails.

✓ It's only allowed for working purposes like sending emails.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches the present tense context, so no correction needed.

× Communicating with colleagues and important things.

✓ Communicating with colleagues and other important things.

The sentence is a fragment and lacks a main verb. Adding 'and other' clarifies the list and connects it properly.

× And I think it's a good thing so you can be destroy.

✓ And I think it's a good thing so you can avoid distractions.

The phrase 'so you can be destroy' is incorrect and unclear. It likely intends to express avoiding distractions or being unproductive, so rephrasing is necessary.

× Yes, I do think I'm spent too much time online because I often get distracted by the constant notifications on my phone, which makes it difficult to concentrate on my work.

✓ Yes, I do think I spend too much time online because I often get distracted by the constant notifications on my phone, which makes it difficult to concentrate on my work.

'I'm spent' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I spend' to indicate present habitual action.

× However, I'm sure I in to limit my screen time by setting specific periods when I avoid using my phone to help me focus more and increase my productive.

✓ However, I'm sure I need to limit my screen time by setting specific periods when I avoid using my phone to help me focus more and increase my productivity.

The phrase 'I in to limit' is incorrect; it should be 'I need to limit'. Also, 'productive' should be the noun 'productivity'.